do you have a list of what revisions you would want?
I listed most of them in my server feedback (but missed one), First, I need to explain that I am not a lawyer and any changes I am described intended to make the license more open and less revocable. If I suggest something that contradicts that intent, it is a mistake / misunderstanding on my part.
Proposed Changes:
Section 1. (c): add sub-paragraph (iv): Your Content may contain other Licensed Content that is not Your Content but is not Unlicensed Content.
The intent with this change is to allow share-a-like work and use other content that people haven't identified as "Unlicensed Content," i.e. "Product Identity."
Section 5., (b) revise as follows: "You permit the use of your Content in agreement with the terms of this License with any Work also bound by this License. You must clearly identify Unlicensed Content that is excluded from the terms of this license...
Basically I am trying, poorly, to say the anything under this license is free to be used by others using this license, unless it is specifically identified as "Unlicensed Content," what was called "Product Identity" in OGL 1.0(a).
Section 6. (f): I don't know how to word this one at all, but I want this revision to do 3 things:
- An independent 3rd party provides the definition of what is hateful / harmful
- This clause only pertains to work using this license.
- There is a review / appeal process be an independent body (back to #1 probably).
Section 7. Strike out the last provision of sub-paragraph (i);
or violate section 6(f). However, I would allow termination after a review and appeal process as noted above.
Section 9. (d): Replace with (from
@Snarf Zagyg):
"In case any one or more of the provisions of this License shall be found to be invalid, illegal or unenforceable in any respect, the validity, legality and enforceability of the remaining provisions contained in this License will not be affected."
The intent is to allow the rest of the license remain valid if something is deemed illegal / unenforceable. May need a provision to update as needed to make legal / enforceable.