Ceramic DM Winter 07 (Final Judgment Posted)

Berandor

lunatic
First draft done. Only 4,000 words, so all turned out right. Now to see whether it makes any sort of sense, at all. I foresee posting my story within the next 2 hours.

And then I'll read the frigging spoiler.

Edit: I just took a look at the other pictures. Wow, yangnome, you are *mean*! Remind me not to enter a Ceramic DM you're running.

Uhm, ever again.
 
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Piratecat

Sesquipedalian
Second draft done. I'm going to walk the dog and reread my ending. I find endings to be the most difficult part of a story. I came in at 3700 words, so we're pretty close to one another. I'll post it once I'm back.

I'll race you to the spoiler.
 

Piratecat

Sesquipedalian
Round 2, Match 2: Piratecat vs. Berandor


Thy Kingdom Come
By Kevin Kulp (Piratecat)

Dateline: June 5
EBRO, FLORIDA


I can smell the cordite. This little corner of the Panhandle goes quiet as the assault rifle fires, surely scaring off any wildlife that might otherwise have expressed an interest in us. Spent cartridges drop into the rich Florida mud at Parker’s feet. I wonder how many cartridges are down there. Thousands, I decide; this hill has the bumpy texture of a teenager’s forehead. The sound of the rifle echoes around us, hammering the rancid summer air. Birds take flight as if in a bad John Woo movie.

From where we stand on the hummock, the target is a pink lump two hundred yards distant. You can’t see the stake it’s tied to. If it squirmed, you wouldn’t be able to tell. It’s too far away.

The fat man next to me bites his lip as he squints and aims. Ripples of flesh jiggle from the recoil. I imagine what it’s like for the bullets to hit, flatten, tear, ricochet, smash. He stops firing and spits out a thin brown stream into the dirt. “Still alive,” he says with a slight grin, and slots another clip. “You want a go?”

I decline, and he brings the rifle back up to his shoulder.

“You can never be sure how hard they’ll be to kill. That’s why I practice. I’ve had everything from simple to nightmarish. The worst one was in a souk in Morocco. She was close to the time, I think, so the killing shot only hurt her. I had to chase her. It got ugly.”

I inquire about gender. “They’re not all male. Most are, I think, but God doesn’t particularly care about gender.” He smiles again, a private joke. “Don’t tell the churches. They’ll be scandalized.”

I’m here in this tropical swamp to profile a man named Parker. He kills children, and he claims he does it to save the world.

- - -

Ten minutes later, I extend a finger to tap the target’s head. Small chunks of pink plastic fall into the mud. He hadn’t said, and I hadn’t been sure. From where I stand next to the green and white stake, I can see the lonely remains of other shattered mannequins dropped into the bushes behind me. I count, and there are at least sixteen. All are the size of children.

I feel exposed as I walk back to Parker. He nods at me. “Got a brother who owns the factory,” he says, and slots a third clip with an audible ka-CHAK. “Even when things are slow, you have to keep your hand in.”

“Does it bother you shooting at something the size of a child?” I ask. He looks at me.

“They’re the right size. Every time I squeeze the trigger, I remind myself what’s at stake. The only difference here is that the target isn’t living.”


June 6
TALAHASSEE, FLORIDA


“The Rapture would come if we’d just let it,” says Parker. “My job is to make sure that it doesn’t. I accomplish that by any means I can.” We are buying coffee in an urban Starbucks. Even with the air conditioning he sweats from the heat. There is another Starbucks two blocks down the avenue, but he has chosen this one for a reason. Parker points out the window and across the street.

“Do you see it?”

I study the storefront with the picture in the window. “Books-A-Million!” the sign trumpets. “30% off!” A bright yellow sign leers at me, sun-faded, boasting an adorable child in a lop-eared bunny suit. Easter-themed, which strikes me as particularly ironic. People stroll past with no idea of what they’re seeing. I study the image of the child, and for a second I think I can sense the sanctity.

Still, it’s an inauspicious introduction to the new messiah.

Parker shades his eyes. “For a while, pictures of that one were everywhere. It was closer to the surface than it is with most of them, and his parents saw it too. They just didn’t understand it. He went easily.”

I keep my expression steady. “No one noticed?” I ask.

“Not particularly. His whole family disappeared. Moved, supposedly. Their neighbors never learned why. Someone filed a missing persons report, and the FBI got involved, but I was long gone by then.”

“You killed them?” I ask, knowing the answer. He knows that he’s being recorded.

“Of course I did.” He studies my face, squinting as if into sunlight. “It goes with the job.”

Something occurs to me. “JonBenét Ramsey?”

He harrumphs, and his jowls wobble. “Sloppy. Not me.”

I ask then who. “There are very few of us, and we don’t know one another. Each person has a protégé or two. We make bad jokes about Star Wars and Sith Lords. But we aren’t evil. I’m certainly not. I’m more like the Little Dutch Boy.”

I raise my eyebrows. “Hans Brinker? The one with the dike?”

Parker nods once. “You know the story. He kept back the flood by sticking his finger in the dike and stopping up the leak until help could come. It led to a lot of schoolyard jokes. It also led to the timeless image.” His head tilts up and his voice gets deeper. “One man standing between innocents and horrible disaster, holding it back with inadequate tools, the only way he knows how.”

“Is that how you see yourself?”

He rips a yellow packet in half and dumps it into his coffee. He doesn’t look at me. “The pressure keeps increasing. These things keep getting born, faster and faster. They’re all over, each one ready to step in when the other one dies, none of them knowing the truth. You know that Buffy show on TV? It stole the idea, only in reverse. Joss got in some trouble for that.”

I ask him to explain.

“In that show there’s only one slayer at a time, right? She dies, another one gets created. The Messiah is the same. One of them dies, and the holy spirit moves on to the next one. Heaven keeps trying. They’ve been trying for nine years.” He grins like a feral dog, showing his teeth. “We’re overdue for Armageddon. Me? I keep the world alive.”

We walk outside, and the wet heat hits us like a club. I try to believe him. What I believe is that I just had coffee with a serial killer.

“How many of these Messiahs have you killed?”

He looks at me, pulling on his sunglasses. I can’t see his eyes. “You want to meet one?”


June 8
OGDEN, UTAH


We stroll past the Dino Day Camp, up by the brachiosaurus exhibit and onto the bridge that leads to the lab and museum. Parker doesn’t seem to be in any particular hurry. Ogden’s Dinosaur Park is busy today. A kid in front of us slaps at mosquitoes, and a small child screams bloody murder when his father holds him up to the fiberglass pterodactyl.

I’m not sure what to look for. Someone walking on water, maybe. Or turning soda pop to wine.

I ask Parker why he’s being so open with me. After pondering it for a time, he answers slowly. “There’s no danger in telling you the truth. You can’t publish.”

I stare at him. “Of course I can. That’s why I’m here.”

“No it isn’t, but I’ll tell you about that later. You’ll never be allowed to publish this story. A number of very influential people have a very large vested interest in seeing that I don’t get caught.” He laughs, but there isn’t much humor in it. He puts his hands in his pockets.

“How so?”

“Think about it. What happens if I fail and a messiah returns to us? I’m sure you read Wikipedia or went to church or something before you got assigned to this story. So what happens?”

“It depends on what religion you are.” I pause. “What religion are you?”

“Later,” he says. “It doesn’t particularly matter whether I’m Muslim, or Christian, or Jewish. It certainly hasn’t mattered to God. Pick a religion, and describe what happens.” He wipes his brow.

I describe what I can remember. Natural disasters and plagues, Armageddon, the judging of the faithful, the dead rising from their graves, ascension into heaven for those found worthy, hell for those who aren’t. A world war. The horsemen of the apocalypse. The more I repeat, the more comes back to me. Most of it sounds like nonsense. “So,” Parker says with intensity, “if a messiah shows up, all that adds up to a lot of misery. Right? And you thought global warming was bad. But in this case, everything ends. And everyone dies.”

I stare at him. “But people get into heaven!”

Some people get into heaven. Quite a few religions, mine included, believe that number is exactly 144,000 souls, drawn from both the living and the dead.” He wipes his brow again. “The last estimate I checked said that about 100 billion people have lived on this Earth. I did the math. If those scientists are right, that puts my chance at making it into heaven at .00014%. It’s the proverbial ‘one chance in a million.’ You feeling righteous enough to take that chance? Cause I’m not.”

I don’t answer him. I wonder whether I can call 911 on my cell phone without him noticing. I point out that his chances of heaven would be better if he didn’t murder children, but he ignores me.

Instead he continues, ticking off points on his fingers. “And there’s seven years of death and misery beforehand, and the world pretty much collapses. So I’m putting that off, too. All it takes is killing some kids who are being used by God. And a lot of powerful people in the know are working on a long-term solution. I don’t worry about official repercussions, so I don’t think you’re actually going to publish.” He looks at me and smiles. “But I surely do appreciate the company. And now we’re here.” He pushes open the door to the museum, and cool air washes around us.

I ask him where the current messiah is. His target. He scans the room and points past a T-rex towards a gawky boy climbing in to a large dinosaur egg. I excuse myself and walk over to the boy. He must be fourteen, and he doesn’t look unusual in the least. He lolls in the huge plaster egg, his mustard-colored shirt making him easy to spot. I realize that I’ve seen him walking in front of us on the way to the building. He’s the boy who slapped at a bug.

He looks at me with pale eyes as I squat down next to the egg. “Hey there,” I say.

“Hey,” says the boy, and his spirit strikes me with the force of a hammer. For a second I have no choice but believe. I would follow this boy anywhere. I would die for this boy. I love him. The rest of the room fades to a pale blur.

I swallow. “I’m a reporter. Who… who are you?”

“My name’s Mike.” He seems exhausted, but his voice transfixes me. I soar in light. “So?”

I stutter out that I’m writing an article. He groans theatrically and my heart leaps. “Not another one! What is it now?”

I shake my head like a wet dog. “What do you mean?”

“The last few weeks, man. Everyone wants to be around me. Everyone wants to talk to me. I dunno why. I got no privacy.” He looks resentful, and then yawns. “I came here to get away. And now a reporter!” I find myself wanting his approval more than I can say. I remember the threat.

“Look,” I manage to get out, “you need to run. There’s a man over there who wants to kill you.” I look around, but Parker is nowhere to be seen. “You’re in real danger.” I look back at Mike, but he looks stoned as he lies inside the egg.

“You know, I feel so good.” He mumbles, but I hear every word. His eyes slide half-closed. He smiles. “Can you maybe call…” He manages to raise his hand and simulate a phone, but my cell is already out and I’m mashing the nine and one and one keys as quickly as I can. Mike slouches into sleep there inside the egg, and I crouch next to him while 911 assures me that an EMT is on the way. And a police car.

No one arrives.

I call again, and the first call was apparently never logged, and they assure me that an ambulance will be sent. I look around and the room is now completely empty, but I can’t leave my savior’s side. No one comes. I call a third time and no one picks up the phone. As I sit there, Mike’s breathing slows, then stops, and just like that the spell is broken. I stumble outside with no idea how much time has passed. Parker is waiting for me in the heat, eating an ice cream cone and spitting tobacco juice into a fountain.

“Told you,” he said. “Almost got to this one too late.”

“How did you…” I ask, and despite myself I start to sob. I hitch and rock. A woman looks at me oddly and shoos her children away from me.

“On the path,” Parker says. “And now you know the truth. For a little while there, he was the son of God.” He looks up to the blue sky. “Another Armageddon averted. A lonely mother sad because her son just died of an undiagnosed heart condition. And right now the divine spirit just entered some other kid. That’s the bitch of it. I try to let them live as long as they can, but we don’t know how old they have to be before everything triggers. There’s too much at stake to allow many risks.”

My breath catches in my throat. Right now I could kill him myself, but curiosity takes hold. “How do you find them?” I manage to ask.

He considers. “Bring your passport.”


June 11
KONYA, TURKEY


They spin in the dust, whirling. Their purple robes shimmer in the heat. The air here smells of incense and something I can’t identify. I wonder if it’s the odor of corruption. It occurred to me on the flight here that the stolid neutrality that I’d maintained throughout my career was badly shaken. I feel lost, bobbing in a sea of insane possibility. Worse, it is an insanity that makes a horrific amount of sense.

In the airport, I whispered to a security guard that my companion had murdered a child. With competent aggression they immediately marched both of us out of the line and into back rooms. They take that sort of thing seriously. I breathed a sigh of relief. And twenty minutes later we were escorted via a little white electric cart directly to Gate 23, where they bumped us to first class and brought us complementary cocktails. Parker didn’t say anything, but he looked disappointed. I felt like I was drowning. I decided to do the only thing I could. I called my editor.

He told me to do my job and hung up.

He must be part of Parker’s conspiracy. There’s no one to trust. I asked Parker about religious leaders. The Pope, for instance. Parker laughed and gulped down a drink, his fleshy throat wobbling as he swallowed. “You think they want the world to end any more than we do?” He didn’t elaborate further. I didn’t ask. I should have. I was still shaken from Utah.

Now jet lag wears at me, and the song is giving me a headache. These dervishes are distinctly modern; they arrived at the ruin in a line of SUVs, they wear sunglasses and sneakers, and their robes are far from traditional. “The hat is the tombstone of the ego,” Parker says. “The skirt is the ego’s shroud. They whirl around the truth.” I don’t particularly believe it. Parker leans over to tell me that this is a daily occurrence, and that these men or their fathers or their forefathers have been performing this dance for five hundred years. Almost as an afterthought, he adds that it wasn’t until nine years ago that anyone remembered why. “And who says that tradition isn’t important,” he chuckles. My hands shake.

The dance ends. Parker steps forward to speak with one of the Sufi mystics. He turns. “China. A bad one. God is upping the ante.”

I take a deep breath and nod.

Later, on the plane, I jostle him awake. “Why me?” I demand. “Why’d you want a reporter if I can’t tell the story?”

He grunts and turns away. “There’s a lot for me to tell. I wanted a hagiographer.”

I stare. “For you? What?”

He turns back. “What do you call a man who selflessly sacrifices his life and his soul to save millions of innocents? Who performs miracles?” I stare at him, and he shrugs. “Most people would call him a saint.”

I try to keep my voice to a whisper. “You’re mad! You’re thwarting God! You’re defying divine will!”

“To save the world,” he reiterates patiently. “I think that sort of defines martyr, don’t you? So make sure you take good notes.”

I want to whine. “But you’re a murderer. That means eternal torment. How are you not going to roast in Hell?”

He winks. “And how do you know there is a Hell? I’ve seen no proof. Maybe the true religion is Judaism. I’m still not sure which Testament god we’re dealing with here, and I don’t particularly care. What I have right now is better than what I’m going to get. I’m happy to prolong it.”

I rub my eyes. He turns back. “I’ll point out that in addition to a biographer, I need a disciple. Think about it.”

Western China rushes past beneath us.


June 21.
UNNAMED VILLAGE NORTH OF YUMEN


We are within a hundred miles of China’s border with Mongolia. This is the embodiment of emptiness. Parker tells me that the village ahead of us didn’t want to be found, and now I think I understand what he means. We certainly didn’t find any roads that led here. We crouch in darkness on the eastern edge of the village. The sun will be up soon. I smell smoke, and goats, and body odor.

Parker speaks quietly. “Now you’ll see why I sometimes feel like one of the three wise men. I just bring high caliber ammunition instead of myrrh.” I fail to laugh. He does it for me.

“Watch the stable,” he says. “That’s usually the place. Symbols are important.”

And sure enough, it’s the ramshackle stable whose door opens first. The sound of a hymn fills the air. I don’t understand the language, but it’s clearly a holy song. It spirals like a dove up into the pre-dawn silence, pure and beautiful. The messiah making his way out to greet the dawn. My breath catches in my throat at the image, and I suddenly wish I could paint with something other than words.

I bring the binoculars to my face. I see two men and a boy, and at first I think that the boy must be the new vessel. They carry a basin. It’s too dark to see what is inside it, but I see something twitch and jiggle. A sacrifice, I ask? Then the sun breaks across the horizon, and the sky above me fills with pink and gold. I gaze upon the Son of Man.

I was wrong. It isn’t the boy who’s the Messiah. It’s the thing in the basin.

It isn’t much of a savior. Naked and mewling and horribly large, it looks like it just pulled itself from the womb. At first I can’t conceive of it being human. It has spindly limbs and the self-aware eyes of a frog, its bloated face oddly passive and content in the morning dawn. It is dried blood and bedsores and caked on filth. I see no sign of divinity in this creature, except maybe that it wasn’t stillborn.

Parker makes a sound of disgust. “One of these,” he says. I don’t have time to ask.

The lilting hymn reaches a crescendo, and the disciples lift the child towards the sky. Parker raises his rifle and looks through the telescopic scope. It’s time. I know in my heart I should stop him and I realize that I don’t have the courage. I wonder what the consequences will be. I wait for the killing shot. I lower my binoculars as if pretending it will help, and from here the target is just a pink lump two hundred yards distant. I can see why Parker practices with the mannequin.

And I can tell when it sees us.

The terrible awe hits me like a geyser, and this time I struggle against it. The distance makes it weaker. I felt this same exultation in the museum with Mike. It knows me and welcomes me, this spirit. I have no doubt whatsoever, and I wait for Parker to kill it. My heart soars in rapture. The shot doesn’t come. The power of the Lord rises up against us, a vast golden wall of terrible love. Conflict wracks me. Angels sing in my ears.

The shot doesn’t come.

I look over to see Parker crying. He’s fitting the end of the rifle barrel into his mouth. He’s clumsy at it. I snatch away the rifle, tearing it from his grasp, and the gun skids across the hard-packed soil. Parker’s lips are working and I’m not surprised to hear him mouthing the Lord’s Prayer. He unholsters his pistol and raises it to his head, tears still coursing down the dust on his fat face. Suicide is a sin, I think irrationally, and I scoop up the rifle.

I hear the song of angels. The holy spirit is eternal, I tell myself. This is what I saw in Mike. This is what I love. If it is gone from here, it will be reborn elsewhere. I’ll have another chance to decide. What I’m doing is buying us some time.

I tell myself it’s not actually death.

It’s still focused on Parker. I think of the Little Dutch Boy, standing in the dark and plugging the leak so that his country will be saved.

I pull the trigger.


- x -
 

Berandor

lunatic
Ceramic DM, Round Two: Piratecat vs. Berandor

Dancing in the Streets


Part one: Dan Smith

The door to the delivery room flew open. A nurse hastened out, pressing a hand to her mouth. Dan stopped wringing his hands and got up.

»Miss? Is everything alright?«

The nurse barely spared him a look and rushed along, disappearing into the ladies' room down the hallway. Dan looked at the door to the delivery room. It was closing slowly. It drew Dan towards it. From inside the room, he heard the doctor giving orders like a general under fire: frantic, yet calm at the same time.

»More swab. Hold it tight. You'll have to sew it. I'll take care of the cervix. Don't faint on me now. For god's sake, get yourself together!«

Rachel's voice was but a tiny whisper in comparison, but Dan heard her every word. »Can I see him?«

The door fell closed. The voices ceased.

A terrible scream echoed through the ward. Dan rushed to the door, but he would be too late. Rachel was dead.

-

Dan took Adam home the same night. The doctors said it was dangerous, that the child might die.

»Very well«, Dan answered. He hoped it did. The ›child‹ was an abnormity, an ugly miscreation. And more, it had killed Rachel. When Dan looked at that misshapen face, he felt like he might puke. He brought the thing home and put it into the room they had prepared. The cot barely contained its bloated body. Dan could not stop staring. The child looked back with its bulging eyes, silent as death.

Dan forced himself away. He closed the door behind him and went downstairs into the living room to make short work of any alcohol he could find. God willing, he would get too drunk to climb the stairs and choke the child as it slept.

»My son«, he said, tasting the words. They tasted foul, slimy. He resisted the urge to spit them out. Tomorrow, he would get a caretaker for the thing. Tonight, he would drink.

-

Over the next months, Dan went through several caretakers. Adam freaked them out. It wasn't so much his looks, they claimed (though Dan hardly believed them). It was his silence. Adam would not utter a sound, whether he was hungry, tired, or his diapers were full. One woman went so far as to put a needle into his arm. The boy flinched, but he did not cry.

A friend of Rachel's, Myriel T. Hago, urged Dan to see a doctor. She was preparing a lawsuit against BioLabs for the radiation treatments Rachel had undergone, a process called OptiChild that was supposed to genetically enhance a child's intelligence. Dan didn't want to spend any more money on Adam than was necessary, but the more damage he could claim, the more likely would BioLabs have to pay for their part in the killing of his wife. He relented.

They did not have to wait for the examination. The nurse was anxious to get Adam out of her sight again and had them go right through. The doctor stared at Adam for a few seconds before catching himself. Dan felt like he was the father of the elephant man. The doctor examined Adam thoroughly. The child's muscles had atrophied from lack of exercise, and of course his bones were bent and crooked, but the nerve reaction was normal, as was his larynx. Adam felt discomfort and pain, and he wasn't dumb, either. He simply didn't cry. Or babble, for that matter.

Dan heaved Adam back into the car. He didn't fasten the seatbelt around the child – perhaps he would have an accident and be relieved of the boy. He got into the driver's seat. Adam stared at him.

»What are you looking at?«, Dan said. »You're gonna kill me, too?«

-

»It's not looking good«, Myriel admitted. »The jury is not convinced you're not simply out for the money.«

»Out for the–« Dan was furious. »It took me almost two years to get this thing to court, and now I'm the bad guy? Let me testify, and I will tell them who the bad guy really is.«

»We can't do that«, Myriel said. »The defense will tear you apart. You're not exactly father of the year.«

»But my wife is dead! And I have to live with – with a freak instead of her.«

»Still, that's not going to make your standing with the jury any better.«

»Then what do you expect me to do?«

Myriel paused for a second. »Get Adam.«

Dan shook his head. »No way.«

»Yes way.« She patted his arm. »We can sell your reluctance as not wanting to hurt the boy, but we have to have him appear in court. One look at him–«

»One look at him, and they'll know what a monster he is.«

»And that BioLabs created him.«

The next day, Dan took Adam to court. The boy looked grotesque, just as Myriel had imagined he would. Barely two years old, he was already the size of a young boy. Dan had put him into a large steel basin in order to make his appearance even more striking. He'd never bothered to buy any clothes for Adam, so the boy was nude and only covered by a large blanket. He still didn't have any hair on his body. Dan could not bear to look at his face with its fat lips, the flat nose and the trumpet-like ears sticking to the sides like alien antennae.

When he ascended the stairs to the courthouse, people started gathering around him. Everybody wanted to take a look at this freak of a child, it seemed. Suddenly, someone pulled the blanket away and revealed the cancerous blob of flesh the boy had for genitalia. The crowd murmured, cell phones and digital cameras flashed. Someone flung a water balloon at Adam. It hit him in the chest. It must have been filled with jelly of some kind, because now Adam was covered in a greasy substance as if freshly born. As if he had just torn Rachel apart. The crowd roared, and even more cameras flashed.

Dan stumbled into the courthouse, barely reaching the men's room before throwing up. He rinsed his mouth with water, and then went to find someone to clean Adam up.

Three days later, the jury awarded Dan and Adam two hundred forty-one million dollars in damages. Another week later, BioLabs declared bancruptcy. They never paid a cent.

-

Dan wrote a book. It came out on the fourth anniversary of Rachel's death. It was an account of Rachel's pregnancy, and of Dan's life with Adam. Critics hailed it as »impressive«, »depressing and realistic«, and »brave and honest«. Dan's editor wanted a picture of Adam on the cover. Dan said no. Ernie also disliked the title. Dan resisted. And so, ›Torn Apart: how OptiChild killed my wife and ruined my life‹ featured an overly cute baby on its cover, and kept its title. It sold one hundred and seventeen copies.

-

Dan put his briefcase on the kitchen table. He scratched his head and got himself a glass and a fresh bottle of vodka. He was in the middle of his second glass when he noticed the sheet of paper. Marie had written a letter. Another caretaker had quit. Dan walked to the foot of the stairs. The first floor was eerily silent.

»Just shout if you need something«, he muttered, then went back to his drink.

The bottle was half empty before he dared check the mail. Invoices, all of them. Dan threw them away. Only when the bottle was empty did Dan notice it had been his last one. He would need to buy some more. He got into the car and drove to town.

A truck was parking in front of Jimmy's Liquor. Dan parked right behind and fumbled to get the key out of the ignition. He made to get out of the car. He noticed the bookstore next to Jimmy's Liquor. He froze. His book stared right at him, on sale for thirty percent off.

»...ruined my life,« Dan muttered. »Ruined.«

The cutest baby in the world grinned at him from the cover of his book.

Dan put the key back into the ignition and started the car. With screeching tires, he sped off. He didn't need more vodka. He needed a gun.

-

Dan opened the door to Adam's room. It was dark; a handful beams of sunlight streaked through the window shutters. Dan was nearly overwhelmed by the smell. He wondered when Marie had left and whether she'd cleaned Adam before she had. He stepped forward to the large cot. Adam sat there, dressed in diapers and nothing else, dried feces on his stomach and legs.

»You're almost five«, Dan leered. »You should have learned to clean yourself by now, freak.«

A book lay next to him, but Dan couldn't make out its title. He picked it up: ›Berenice‹. It didn't seem like a children's book, but then he didn't know that much about children's books, anyway. Or about writing books. Dan drew the gun he'd just bought.

He pointed it at Adam. It felt reassuringly heavy in his hand. Adam simply stared at it. His ears twitched, but his eyes did not blink.

»You killed my wife and ruined my life.«

Adam reached out to touch the gun, but his bent arms did not reach it.

»You f...ing ruined my life.« Dan felt tears running down his face. He tried to blink them away. When he closed his eyes, he could hear Rachel's dying scream, her terror when she saw what she had given birth to. Sorry, the doctors had said. Bancrupt, BioLabs had said. Thirty percent off, the picture had said.

»F...ing starve to death, you freak.« Dan turned the gun around, put it in his mouth, and pulled the trigger.

The police found Adam, caked in feces and blood, reading his book in near total darkness.

-

Part two: Adam

His mother had been a dancer, Adam was sure of it. She danced all the time, even when there wasn't any music playing. She heard the music in her head, and that was enough. Adam could see her, standing in the street, her hands full with shopping bags, spreading her arms and swirling around. All the other people had to duck away from her, to make room for her dancing. And they looked at her angrily, and she smiled, and their anger disappeared.

And when she came home, she would grab Adam and sweep him through the kitchen, into the living room, and out into the garden. She sun would shine for them, and they would smile back at the sun, and everything would be fine.

But his mother never came home. She had spoken, she had sung, she had screamed. And when she did, she had died. Adam would not die, and so he did not speak, nor sing, nor scream. It was too dangerous.

Adam still remembered the look the doctor gave him in the delivery room. He remembered the exact face the man had made, even though at the time, Adam had not known it was a face. He remembered everything that had ever happened to him. If one of the many caretakers read a book to him, he would remember every sound she made, and every letter that went along with it. And if his father came into his room late at night to sneer at him, Adam would remember every bit of hate and disgust that man offered him. And when his father went back to his drinks, Adam would close his eyes and see his mother dance.

He also remembered the gun in his face. It was one of his favorite memories. He had been tested, then. Adam had been hungry that evening, and soiled. His father had taken his book away, and then threatened him with a gun. But Adam had not said anything. For a moment, he'd wanted to apologize, even though he didn't know why or what for, but he had managed to remain silent, and had survived.

Silence was golden.

-

After his father died, Adam was brought to Saint Angela's orphanage, where the only book allowed was the bible, where the nuns were mean, and where the children were meaner. The nuns often beat Adam with a paddle, and the children liked to try to make him scream by pinching him or putting beetles on his face. Still, it was the best time he'd had so far. Adam was put into a wheelchair, and as he learned to push the wheels and himself forward, he was also allowed to go outside, to the courtyard. It was so wonderful, Adam had almost squealed with joy, and only barely restrained himself.

About six weeks after he had gotten to the orphanage, a woman arrived. Adam recognized her as his father's lawyer, Myriel. She smelled nice, not at all like the nuns. She smelled of life. Adam watched her bosom rise and fall as she breathed. He liked that.

»Hey,« Myriel said. »How are you, Adam? You look good.«

Adam would never look good; not while he was in this imperfect body. But he chose not to hold the lie against her.

»I've got good news«, she said. »They're going to publish a book about you. Your father wrote it – most of it, anyway, and now they've got this journalist who's going to write an addendum. And you know what?«

She smiled at him. Adam stared back, too caught up in her smell and her breathing to react.

»They want a picture of you on the cover. You know what the cover is, don't you?«

Adam made his ears twitch. Myriel got the hint.

»Of course you do. Anyway, what do you say if we go outside and make a few pictures, right now? It'll be fun!«

Adam forced his maligned muscles into a smile.

»Great! Let's go.«

›Suffer the Little Children‹ came out two months later, featuring Adam's face on the cover and a full-body shot on the back. It sold a hundred million copies worldwide.

A few months later, Adam was adopted by struggling physicist Dr. Mark Adair, his wife Emily, and their son Steve. The money, they claimed, was not a factor in their decision.

-

»What's this, then?« Steve asked.

He was home on one of his rare visits from UCLA, and as always he wanted to see what Adam had been up to since they last saw each other. Steve probably thought that as always, it would end with him rolling his eyes at Adam and leaving for university with new stories about his freak brother.

Adam typed something into the computer installed on his wheelchair, and the monitor facing Steve showed the message. It's comfortable.

»Yeah?« Steve frowned. »Maybe for someone like you, but I've grown in the last ten years. I wouldn't even fit in.«

Sure you would.

»Anyway. What's it for?«

I can't explain. I must show you.

Adam could have explained. He could have explained that after getting his engineering degree and his doctor of medicine, he had spent what had been left of his fortune to build himself a new body. That he had invented and constructed a machine that would tear his own body to shreds, preserving only the brain, and transplanting it into a perfect shell, a slim, lithe, and powerful body looking not unlike a mannequin and being equally sexless. Adam saw no use for genitals. And he saw no use in explaining all this to Steve, the art major who couldn't tell the difference between a neuron and a neutron.

»Alright, but I gotta tell you, I feel like an assistant to Copperfield or something. Don't saw me into two, alright?«

I will make you disappear.

Steve laughed. » I see you've developed a sense of humor. Better late than never, eh?«

Adam did not respond. Steve shrugged. »Whatever.«

He sat down on the edge of the chamber and swung his feet inside. Finally, he took up a curled position in the nest-like chamber.

»This must be what flying in an alien escape pod must feel like.« Steve turned to look at Adam and put his hand up like a telephone. »Adam phone home.«

Very funny, Adam typed. He called up the command screen on his computer and de-activated the interior controls. Now to see whether his construction had worked. Would Steve's body be totally destroyed? Would his brain survive long enough for a theoretical transplantation? Adam clicked on the command screen. The chamber closed.

»What the–?« Steve sounded surprised, but not worried. »It seems I was wrong about your sense of humor, Adam, because that's not. Funny! Now let me out of here.«

Adam hesitated for a moment. Nothing had happened yet. He could pretend it had just been a joke. Nobody would ever know. Nor would he know whether the extractor worked. Adam imagined himself in his new body. Walking across the street, jumping over fences, and above all: dancing. He saw himself dancing. He clicked the screen again.

»What's happening now, Adam? What's tha–«

The rest was screaming.

Adam cursed himself for not sound-proofing the extractor. He turned his wheelchair away from the machine and towards the stairs out of the basement. That's where Steve's parents would come from if they heard anything. Adam counted ten seconds before the scream was cut off. He waited for ten minutes, and when nobody came, he turned his focus back on the conputer screen. He smiled. The extraction had been a success.

-

Adam bounded up the stairs and threw the door wide open. He ran into the moonlit garden, arms spread wide. He tested his new legs by jumping up and down a few times. He turned around and around, in ever faster circles, watching the world swoosh past his new eyes. He heard the living night with his new ears, and the distant sound of a television.

-

Dr. Mark Adair got up as the first commercial began to blare its message. »Do you want something from the kitchen, Em?«

»You could re-fill my wine,« Emily Adair answered, holding up her empty glass without looking. Mark Adair took the glass from her hands.

Adam watched his foster father leave the room. He opened the garden door and slipped into the living room. With a few steps – actual steps! – he stood behind the couch. Emily did not look up. For a moment, Adam watched her bosom rise and fall as she breathed. He liked that. Emily shuddered.

»Did you open a window, honey?«

She turned her head. Adam pressed one hand in front of her mouth and the other around her neck. He broke her like a twig.

»Did you say something?« Dr. Mark Adair came back from the kitchen, a glass of wine and a bottle of beer in his hands. He froze as he saw Adam's new body.

»Who – what are you?« His foster father looked past him. »What did you do to my wife?«

Adam walked towards his foster father. He had to set himself free. Mark Adair stared at him, eyes growing wide, recognizing something.

»Adam? Is that you?«

Adam gently took the wine glass from his foster father's hands. It did not break. Adam had perfect control over his electronic muscles. He plunged the glass deep into his foster father's chest.

-

Adam stepped over the twitching body. He had remade himself, and now his fake family was gone. Soon, he would dance with his mother. There were just a few more ties he had to sever. He still remembered the children who had tortured him, the nurses who had punished him, and the look on the doctor's face in the delivery room. And he remembered all of their names.

-

The orphanage was quiet in the night. Adam stalked the hallway leading to the head nurse's office. He should have come here first. Looking up the children's names, even on the internet, had not helped very much. Adam had only been able to locate three of them, and one had already been dead. The other two had died quickly, as well. Adam found that he had gotten somewhat bored of killing. Perhaps after burning down the orphanage, he would stop for a while. Leave the country, take dancing lessons, and come back when the mood struck him. It wasn't as if he was pressed for time.

Light spilled out from under the office door. Adam heard pages being turned, accompanied by stifled yawns. He turned the doorknob and opened the door just an inch, when suddenly it was pulled from his grip and pulled back.

There were three men in the office, dressed in riot gear. One man was flipping the pages of a book. The second one had opened the door and smiled grimly at Adam, mimicking a yawn. The third one stood directly in front of the doorway, aiming large rifle at Adam. The hum of electrical current emanated from the strange-looking weapon.

»Hello, Adam,« said the gunman. He pulled the trigger. There was a flash, and then darkness.

-

Another flash, and the world came back. He was outside. It was day. In front of him, half a dozen soldiers with automatic rifles knelt on the ground, facing him. Adam tried to shield himself from the sun, but his arm wouldn't lift. He looked at his body – what was left of it. His arms had been torn off. His legs stuck in a block of cement. They would not move, either. Furthermore, he was bound tight to a pole.

»Adam Smith,« a woman said.

He turned his head back towards the firing squad. Next to the soldiers was a woman in a business dress, reading from a folder she held in her hands.

»You have been found guilty of murder and sentenced to death. In order to insure your passing, your artificial body will be put under heavy fire until it is utterly destroyed. Do you have any final words?«

Adam did not respond. He wanted to see them try.

»Very well,« the woman said. She turned to one of the soldiers. »Sergeant.«

Muzzles flared in staccato. Bullets step-danced on his skin, ricocheting everywhere. The paint coat splattered, tumbling through the air like snowflakes. His skin bent, but did not break.

The gunfire stopped, magazines depleted. Adam's left eye had stopped working, but other than that, he felt fine. The soldiers stared at him. The sergeant spit.

»Get the grenade launcher.«

One of the soldiers got up and hurried to a building in the distance. Adam tried to grin, but only half of his mouth still obeyed his commands.

Was it simply the echo of the gunfire, or did he hear music? Yes, definitely. It had an Eastern European flavor. Adam turned his head to see where it came from. There, next to the firing squad, was a group of four women, dressed in some kind of traditional garb, swirling around to the music. He had not noticed them before. Strange.

The soldier returned from the building, carrying a large rifle. One of the women stopped dancing. Her skirt continued to twirl. The soldier prepared the rifle and aimed. Adam stared in shock at the woman – it was her! She had finally come to him. He wanted to join her, to dance with her, but his legs would not move. They were trapped in something. Adam pulled with all his might, but they would not budge. The woman smiled at him, holding out a hand, beckoning to him. And yet he could not reach her. Adam opened his mouth.

»Mother,« he said, only then realizing his mistake. He had spoken.

The sergeant nodded towards the soldier.

»Fire!«
 

tadk

Explorer
no more reason to write

Personal comment to participants not judges please
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Damn

No more reason for me to write anymore

Thank You Piratecat

TK.
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Berandor

lunatic
Spoiler for anybody except the judges :D
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Damn. Congratulations, I guess. What a great, great idea. What a brilliant story. That's all I can say right now. Damn.

At least I tried.
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Oh, and Herreman: Very funny. Not. :)
 

FickleGM

Explorer
Comments for Piratecat...

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tadk said:
Damn

No more reason for me to write anymore

Thank You Piratecat

TK

What he said. Well done, Piratecat. Bravo. Captivating. Encore. Encore.[/sblock]
 
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Piratecat

Sesquipedalian
I note that I mis-linked one of the photos. The dervish shot shot should be this link, not this thread itself -- sorry about that!

[sblock=Spoilers for non-judges]Berandor, I really liked that. I thought the beginning was especially creepy; your portrait of the silent child and the miserable father was excellent. When he sees the book cover with the adorable child on it, I got a shiver. Damn good photo usage.

Thank you so much for the kind comments. I'm really glad you liked my story. The ending was absurdly difficult to write, but I'm very happy with how it came out.

More later. I need to breathe. :)[/sblock]
 
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Berandor

lunatic
Uhm, not that I might be afraid or something, but could you guys spoiler the adoration? Wouldn't want to influence the judges, right?

[sblock]I don't know that it will make a difference, but just on principle.[/sblock]
 

tadk

Explorer
My personal opinion in the SBlock

My personal opinion in the SBlock
Judges dont read please.

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I think this story, personal opinion, needs to be nominated for like Hugos or something. Honestly, it needs to sit next to The 9 Million Names of God and other stories like it.

I found Berandor's story to be strong as well, Dont get me wrong. Not in the least bit. In any other CDM, any other WRITING competition, it rocked.

But Piratecat, you made me doubt my ability to write.
Easy win for Rodrigo this round (well against me when is it not :) )

Just my 2 cents worth.
And trying to do a design an RPG challenge at the same time. What a maroon I are.

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