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Congratulations to all that got in.
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I though that his reason for leaving was pretty clear, that he found after some time with his kin, that the simple life of the pixie wasn't for him. Seems pretty straightforward, and a great reason to leave.
He went to the desert as an explorer, which was the last part of his long journey (see the first part of the second paragraph, which I'd hoped to expand upon later when I found more time) exploring the world before heading to the Kingdom of Knowledge, with only the mention of great treasures driving him onwards though the harsh conditions. The treasure was not his reason for going there in the first place, though it was the cause of him gaining the emnity of the Jann.
Why he thought his skills would be welcome in the Kingdom. He's an explorer so why wouldn't a kingdom that prizes knowledge want the knowledge he had already gained from spending many years in the world, exploring it's many and varied nuances, and use his obvious ability to gather more.
As for a brief explanation of how he'd aided or worked for Taala. I notice a few who were picked had little more connection than joining a band of adventurers (not even mentioned as being in Taala's service), returning to the kingdom itself, or nothing at all, so I don't know that that's entirely relevant. Though I had hoped to write more about that with at least some of the other characters who were picked, though his abilities as an explorer were inferred to be his reason for thinking he might be accepted there...obviously too subtle on my part.
Oh, and he was going to be neutral, not chaotic neutral.
Anyway, that said, I not terribly surprised or worried about not getting in, as the backstory was a rush job, after I'd given up all hope of trying to write anything to get into the game (bad case of writers block for several days, as I didn't spot the thread until 3-4 days ago).
Mainly I'm concerned that the backstory I did manage to get up was so thoroughly misinterpretted.
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I think you've misread a lot of Perynomen's backstory to come up with that conclusion, so I'll answer your concerns as I see them.Isida Kep'Tukari said:unleashed with Perynomen, (CN?) Male Pixie Wilderness Rogue 4 [Race MM pg.236/ Class UA pg.56]
Sneaky little bugger, ain't he? My concerns are that there's little reason for him to suddenly go from being content in the forest to being scortched and frozen in the desert. Then he is drawn on by the lure of treasure... where did this come from? He may have been born different, but I wish that had been made more explicit, or an alternate reason had been expounded upon. The fact that he tricked the shiek is consistant with what background is known, but I'm not sure why he would think his skills would be welcome in the Kingdom of Knowledge. Taala gave the party the isle-ship for heroics and services rendered, so I was hoping for a brief explaination of how you had aided or worked for Taala in the past. What you have is only the beginning of your story, and I need a few more chapters to put him in my story.
I though that his reason for leaving was pretty clear, that he found after some time with his kin, that the simple life of the pixie wasn't for him. Seems pretty straightforward, and a great reason to leave.
He went to the desert as an explorer, which was the last part of his long journey (see the first part of the second paragraph, which I'd hoped to expand upon later when I found more time) exploring the world before heading to the Kingdom of Knowledge, with only the mention of great treasures driving him onwards though the harsh conditions. The treasure was not his reason for going there in the first place, though it was the cause of him gaining the emnity of the Jann.
Why he thought his skills would be welcome in the Kingdom. He's an explorer so why wouldn't a kingdom that prizes knowledge want the knowledge he had already gained from spending many years in the world, exploring it's many and varied nuances, and use his obvious ability to gather more.
As for a brief explanation of how he'd aided or worked for Taala. I notice a few who were picked had little more connection than joining a band of adventurers (not even mentioned as being in Taala's service), returning to the kingdom itself, or nothing at all, so I don't know that that's entirely relevant. Though I had hoped to write more about that with at least some of the other characters who were picked, though his abilities as an explorer were inferred to be his reason for thinking he might be accepted there...obviously too subtle on my part.
Oh, and he was going to be neutral, not chaotic neutral.

Anyway, that said, I not terribly surprised or worried about not getting in, as the backstory was a rush job, after I'd given up all hope of trying to write anything to get into the game (bad case of writers block for several days, as I didn't spot the thread until 3-4 days ago).


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