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[megamania]

I see you like to use short scene descriptions also. I use "Segments" on my storyhours. Each segment is 1-3 pages on Word and contains a complete thought/scene involving the characters. I then number the segment for my own reference and use.

My first Storyhour- Under A Darksun has become extremely complex with the number of characters and suypporting characters that I use.

If you're looking for freindly critiques, I would suggest either more length or be sure to begin and end with a central idea. Flesh it out.

Seems good with what you have done thus far.

 

[Skade]

Right now I've only got the first chapter up, I think I need some work on writing fight scenes as well; but I'm trying to evoke the emotions(especially working on the chivalry, something that I didn't much get a chance to play up in High School, but it's a big part of Colin, since it clashes with The Litany, the laws of the Garou) inherent in a scene. Lemme know how I'm doing on both counts(emotions and fights, and anything else you think that needs work).

Sorry I did not respond earlier, I had to go to work.

I'll give it a read, and try and post to it, I've been discussing this very thing on another board lately, so I'll give yours my best effort.

 

[blackshirt5]

Thanks for the feedback megamania; as far as my writing process goes, I write in a notebook at home and work, rework it a few times(anywhere between 1 and 4, usually) and then I post it up on the boards, although this time I broke it up over 3 posts, just in case the board crashed or something while I was posting.

I've got a lot of free time today, so I might write up the second chapter "Wolves Care For Their Own" today and post it up.

 

[Carnifex]

*apes about*

 

[Tallok]

h'lo 'fex How's it?

 

[Carnifex]

h'lo 'fex How's it?

'tis well. Finally getting somewhere in writing the Biothaumaturgist's Handbook, though I'm not sure how long this streak of motivation to write will last

You?

 

[Tallok]

'tis well. Finally getting somewhere in writing the Biothaumaturgist's Handbook, though I'm not sure how long this streak of motivation to write will last

You?

Pretty good, I saw the new Matrix last night, and it was a let down, especially after liking #2, but I'm on a 3 day weekend, and I'm starting my D&D campaign this afternoon
btw, I really like the ideas in the biothaumaturgists book

 

[Carnifex]

Pretty good, I saw the new Matrix last night, and it was a let down, especially after liking #2, but I'm on a 3 day weekend, and I'm starting my D&D campaign this afternoon
btw, I really like the ideas in the biothaumaturgists book

I quite liked the Matrix 3, even if the end was a little silly

 

[blackshirt5]

Um, slap my face and call me ignorant, but what's the biothaumaturgist's handbook? Just from the title, it sounds like something I might be interested in for my campaign.

KREE@ KREE!

 

[Tallok]

I quite liked the Matrix 3, even if the end was a little silly

eh, it was ok, all the problems in the script were higlighted by some people behind us laughing, even though I was the only one who noticed. The biggest problem for me was just the fact that it had a completely different feel from the other movies. But I'm not as much a cynic as some, like my local paper