Cleon
Legend
Looks good to me! I'd just alter one sentence for parallel structure:
Should the maiden manage to regain the stolen garment from her 'lord' or 'husband', she immediately flies away but often returns to kill or pauperize her persecutor.
I don't care for that. Would you accept:
The maiden immediately flies away should she manage to regain the stolen garment from her 'lord' or 'husband', but often returns to kill or pauperize her persecutor.