ENW Short Story Smackdown Summer 07 (Winner Announced)

ENWorld Short Story Smackdown Summer 07

Round 1, Match 6

Best Friends
by Mike Rousos (Avatar_V)

I suppose you’re wondering why I’ve hung this stag’s skull here. Well, it’s something of a memorial. For a friend. You want the whole story? Well, it could take a while, but since you asked...

It all began several years ago when I met Avari. No, too far back; let me pick up last year. Everyone has had a best friend at one point or another – this time last year is when my story began to become a little bit more unusual.

The day began normally enough – Avari stopped by with the grin on her face that told me she had come up with another crazy plan for the day. As I saw her riding up our drive on her bike, I called up the stairs, “Mom, Avari’s here – can I go out?”

And the usual reply came back down the stairs, “Be sure you’re back for dinner. And wear your helmet.” I hollered a quick thanks back to my mom and headed out. Of course, I knew she would let me go – especially that morning. See, that evening Avari was boarding a plane to meet her biological parents for the first time (she was adopted) and this was my last chance to hang out with her for more than two weeks. As I suspected, Avari had indeed formed a plan for the day. As we rode, she explained that on a hill just outside of town, using surplus concrete chutes from recent city sewer work, people had constructed something like a race course that sleds or carts could be piloted down. And, of course, Avari had secured two small carts perfect for the occasion. I laughed when I heard it, it seemed such an absurd past time. But, when we arrived, it was just as promised. And, as with all of Avari’s plans, it was a lot of fun. We spent the whole morning running up the hill, our carts in tow, and then racing them back down to the bottom.

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“Sarah,” Avari would call as she sped behind me, “try putting your hands up!” Naturally, Avari was careening down the hill without holding her cart. I continued to hold tightly to mine despite her urgings. I was always the more cautious of the two of us (my mom’s incessant reminders to wear my bike helmet were thoroughly unnecessary). In true Avari fashion, though, she mastered the ‘hands free’ method of running the course – not to mention the fact that she soon began putting her cart in front of mine so that she could pick up a lot more speed than I was willing to. Despite all the bravado, though, as I rested at the bottom of the hill before we left (as Avari made a few last runs), I could see that once or twice when she took a corner too quickly and nearly left the track that she got scared as well. It was always easy to tell when Avari was scared because she would squeeze her eyes tightly shut. In a way it was comforting to know that I wasn’t the only one of us that got scared.

Shortly after noon, we wrapped up the chute racing and got back on our bikes in search of food. It wasn’t a long morning, and not that unusual for us, really. But, it was the perfect way to say goodbye to Avari before she left for a couple of weeks because it was such a typical thing to do with her. It seemed whenever she was around (and it was a lot), we would find the craziest things to do – but we would have more fun than I suspect any other two friends have ever had together while we were doing them. It seemed that wherever we went and whatever we did, it was exciting to do it together. Avari was like me, even for all of our outward differences – she really understood me. And we really cared about each other. That’s why it was so hard to say goodbye to her that evening when she left for her plane, even though she was coming back in two weeks.

That’s why it was so hard when I learned her plane had crashed into the Atlantic Ocean and that she was never coming back.

*****

My life changed after that. For months, I was a wreck emotionally. I have a photo-album with pictures of me and my friends. Sometimes I re-arrange the pictures in it based on which friends I’m fondest of currently. It’s a silly thing to do, I know, but I do it all the same. After Avari’s accident, I took her pictures (already in the front) and glued them in place. It was my way of telling her that I would never forget her. Slowly, life returned to normal. School resumed, though it wasn’t the same without her. And, then the school year ended and I hung out with my other friends – though I couldn’t help but think of what things would be like without Avari around.

Then, nearly a year after the plane crash, just as life was beginning to feel normal again, I received the letter. My mom handed me the envelope just before dinner, saying that it had come in the mail that day. I opened it immediately (I don’t get much mail) and read it. My mom grew worried for me as I looked at it – my face must have turned a ghostly white. She asked who it was from, concerned, but I didn’t answer. I just told her that my appetite was gone and that I thought I was going to be sick – and I rushed to my room. If you haven’t guessed by now, the letter was from Avari. It was in her handwriting and bore her signature. I had no idea what to think. Had she somehow survived? It didn’t seem possible – and yet, here was the letter. The contents were quite simple. It read: “Sarah, How have you been? I’ve missed you SO much this past year! I’m so sorry I haven’t been able to contact you sooner. Please come and meet me – I need a favor. Get on the bus that stops at the end of your road at midnight tonight. Ride it to the end of its route and meet me there. I can’t wait to see you! Love, Avari” Why was she only writing to me now if she was alive? What was the favor? Don’t the buses stop running at ten? How can she say tonight and be confident I’ll read it on the right day? Hundreds of questions like these raced through my mind. Large among them – was this some sort of cruel joke? Was it safe? But, I’d know Avari’s handwriting anywhere and for her – not for anyone else, but for her – I had enough trust to overlook the mountain of questions the letter raised. And so, that night, after riding out my mom’s dogged attempts to find out what was going on, I slipped quietly from my house and onto the bus that I never knew ran this late into the night. From then on, things only got weirder.

*****

I know that many of you are going to think the rest of this story is made up, but I can only promise as often as you like that it’s true and beg that you believe me. Or, disbelieve if you will – it doesn’t change the facts. I was not dreaming. Trust me, I pinched myself more than once, this is the truth. I rode the bus until the end of its route. I thought that this line only ran across town, but it seemed that we travelled far too long for that. In the darkness, I couldn’t say where we were going. I was alone on the bus, Avari’s letter clutched in my hand. What felt like hours rolled by as I sat, too petrified to ask the bus driver where we were going. Finally, when I could almost bear my fear no longer, the bus stopped and the doors opened. Nervously, I got up, and walked off of the bus.

Though the night sky had been pitch black out of the bus windows, as I stepped from the bus, I was surrounded in a strange blue light. Behind me there was no bus only a door in – well, in nothingness. There, right in the air, was a door that looked back into the bus. The bus driver smiled and tipped his cap at me as I looked back. And then, the bus doors shut and I turned forward to face the strangest site I have ever seen.

Before me, there sat an old woman on an enormous ball of glittering blue and green yarn. The woman had four arms and was knitting. What she knit (for I could not say what it was) hung from her needles, wrapped around her skein of yarn, and looped in endless piles as far to her right and left as I could see.

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Then I heard a voice – it was Avari’s. “Sarah! You came!” I looked at the old woman and squinted. She looked nothing like Avari, though the voice was unmistakable to me. Then I heard a laugh, “No, down here!” And I looked down. There, at the base of the enormous skein of yarn sat a cat. And the cat was talking. “Oh, how foolish of me! I forgot that I look like a cat still. Of course you won’t recognize me like this!” Then, a moment later, the cat shimmered, vanished, and was replaced with Avari, just as I remembered her. For that moment, my joy overwhelmed whatever trepidation this foreign world had me under. I ran to Avari and embraced her.

Neglecting, for the moment, the four-armed woman, I asked the first thing that came to my mind, “I thought you were dead!”

Avari laughed. “No, of course I’m not.” She looked up at the old lady and continued, “I’m a daughter of the Time-Spinner. This is my home. I can travel to your world if I want, but to come back here, all I need to do is to squeeze my eyes really tightly, concentrate hard, think about it and, poof, I’m back here.” She squeezed her eyes shut to demonstrate.

I smiled in recognition – “I know that face – that’s your worried face. So, all those times that I thought you were scared, you were actually getting ready to come here?”

Avari nodded, “Yep, you know, getting ready just in case I had to make an abrupt exit to keep from getting hurt. Luckily, I didn’t have to before I meant to – that would have really raised some questions!”

I laughed, “I suppose so.” Then, I thought about what she had just said. “’Before you had to,’ you said. That means that you left the plane before it crashed – which is why you’re alive – and that you were planning on doing it beforehand?” I was a bit perplexed.

Avari nodded. “That was the plan, yes. My mother,” Avari gestured at the woman again, “she creates time.” Seeing my baffled expression, she explained further, “What, you didn’t think it just magically appeared, did you? Does wood just magically appear? No, it comes from trees. Do animals just appear? No, they come from other animals. Time doesn’t just appear, either. Before there can be another second, or minute, or anything like that, my mother has to knit it.”

“Then, what’s happening right now…” I interrupted.

“Yep,” Avari saw where my question was going, “we’re experiencing time, so that means my mother made it. I think she knitted these moments a few weeks ago.” My head was spinning, but Avari continued, “So, as you can see, to keep up she knits a bit ahead. That’s how she knew the plane would crash and she agreed that it would be the perfect opportunity for me to get back here without raising any unwanted questions. I just had to take the plane (with a pretext of ‘going to see my family’) and then, before it crashed, teleport back here. Couldn’t be simpler. That’s how I’m alive.”

Somehow I didn’t think more questions about that were going to make it any simpler for me to understand, so I moved on, “Then you wanted to come back. But, why?”

“Oh, because my mission was done.”

“Mission? What was your mission?”

Avari smiled, “I’ve been wanting to tell you for years, but I haven’t been able to! My mission was to investigate a human that my mother thought could someday be our ally. You see, there are places where we can’t go and there are things that our race can’t do. For that, we need humans to help us. But, we can’t choose just anyone. Most people would freak out just coming here! So, I was sent to earn the trust of a promising human so that, later, if we needed help, we could ask them and they would already be familiar with me.”

I took a moment to process this answer and, as I did, my heart sank. For the first time since entering this alien world I felt out of place and a bit ill. It must have shown on my face because Avari moved towards me. I held up a hand of protest and voiced the emotion that was filling my eyes with tears. “Avari, do you understand what you’re saying?” I paused to compose myself; I could see that Avari was confused. “You’re the best friend I’ve ever had. Ever. I loved you. I would have done anything for you – even get on a mysterious bus at midnight with no explanation. But, now you’re telling me that the only reason you were my friend at all was because it was your mission? I thought that you loved me, but it was just a job. All of our laughter and jokes – they feel so empty all of a sudden; they were just a chore to get me here.”

Avari’s eyes grew wide and she answered quickly, “No, Sarah, that’s not at all what I’m saying! You are my best friend.”

“And you can take any form you want, can’t you?” I interrupted her. “You just chose to look like a girl my age so that I would like you.” I motioned at the girl in front of me, “This isn’t really you, is it?”

Avari slowly shook her head, “It’s true I only look like this around you. My mother prefers that I look like a cat so that she can pet me. I’ve taken many different forms at different times. But, you must believe me, Sarah, that befriending you because it was my mission doesn’t mean you didn’t really become my friend.”

“Then why did you let me think you were dead for a year?”

Avari paused for a moment, searching for words. “We couldn’t tell you until the time was right. Please believe me that I wanted to. But, my mother said that I mustn’t.”

I shook my head not sure what to think. Instead, I wandered away from Avari, wondering if there was a place around here to clear my head. Of course, there wasn’t. So, I just stood some distance from them, thinking. Finally, Avari came to me. “I’m sorry that you never knew the truth about me – I would have told you if I was able.” I didn’t say anything, so she continued, “Will you come and speak to my mother now? We still need your help.”

“Right, the real reason for our reunion.” I frowned. “Actually, I think I’d rather just go home.”

“I’m afraid my mother won’t like that much. She probably won’t call the bus for you until you’ve talked with her – she still believes that you will help us.”

I sighed. “I suppose I don’t have much choice then, do I? I’ll talk to her. But for the sake of the old Avari I knew – the human one, even if she never really existed.”

*****

And so, I was escorted back to the enormous ball of yarn and before the four-armed woman. Not sure how to begin such a conversation I said quietly, “Hello, madam.”

The woman looked up abruptly from her work and studied me. “Yes, girl, but what do you say to the proposal?”

I had no idea how to answer. Avari turned back into a cat and leapt onto her mother’s lap. I could hear her voice, “Mother, you haven’t asked her yet. You’re getting ahead of yourself. You’ve only just met for the first time.”

The woman looked perplexed for a moment and then looked down at the scarf-like product hanging from her needles. “Oh,” she said after studying it a moment, “you mean we’re here and not here!” I began to think that this place was getting weirder by the moment. Satisfied that she knew what was going on, the woman looked back up. “Greetings, child.” She looked down at the scarf to check herself and smiled.

I curtsied, not sure what else to do. Then I waited.

Finally, she continued. “As my daughter has told you, we need your help. There is a man. He lives in the western part of your country. And he has discovered that time is made. Worse, he has discovered the existence of beings like us and has captured one of our kin! He is a scholar – a scientist as you call them nowadays – and he has found ways to manipulate time as we do. With his rudimentary knowledge, he has created a device that prevents poor Nel (for that is who is entrapped) from teleporting home. His contraption distorts space-time such that none of us can leave your world within several miles of it. More devious still, his device is protected with a warped time field around it that would be most fatal for any of us to stand in. So, we cannot disable the machine. Therefore, he has successfully kept Nel imprisoned in a small cage (she had the form of a bird when he found her). If someone like you does not help us, she will surely be killed and dissected for study. A human like yourself could safely go close enough to the machine to disable it. That is the favor we must ask.”

I thought about it for a moment. It was all so bizarre. “Can Nel not just change her shape into something small enough to escape the cage or something large enough to break it?”

“Thank you, child,” the old woman beamed at me, “I knew that we could count on you!”

Again, I looked bewildered and, again, Avari corrected her, “Mother, we’re here, not there!” A furry paw pointed at the scarf. “She hasn’t agreed to help yet!”

“Oh, goodness, you are right,” The woman gasped. “My, I am scatter-minded today. To answer your question, dear, we can only change shape when we are in this world. Once we enter your world we must maintain our shape until we leave.”

I nodded. And then I thought for a good long time. At length I looked up at the woman and commented, “A week ago, a world like this would never have entered my imagination.”

She answered thoughtfully, “Greetings, child.” Avari nudged her and she quickly corrected herself, “I mean to say – yes, girl, but what do you say to the proposal?”

I sighed and said, “As you clearly already know, I will try to help you.”

“Thank you, child,” the old woman beamed at me, “I knew that we could count on you!”

*****

The bus ride was at least as long on the way back as it had been on the way there, but I didn’t notice. I had far too much on my mind. The old Time-Spinner had explained to me that there was no time to lose (the scientist was not at his laboratory, but would be returning by mid-morning) and so I would be taken directly to the outskirts of the medaling man’s lands. So, after a long and bumpy bus ride through darkness, I found myself deposited in the middle of a sparse forest – I did not know precisely where. The sky was still dark, for it was not quite dawn yet. The bus driver tipped his cap at me once more and explained that I was only two miles south of the scientist’s laboratory and that, if I walked north, I could be in and out with ease before he returned. With that, the bus door vanished and I was left alone in the dark forest.

Every sound made me jump. I’m sure that it’s perfectly normal for a forest to be lively at night, but all the same, I moved forward as quickly as the light of the moon would allow. In time, I came to a fence and I knew that I was getting close. Signs posted on the chain fence read ‘Keep Out’ and warned that entering would be trespassing. Quickly, and as quietly as I could, I scaled the fence. I found myself wishing Avari was there since she was always the better climber of the two of us. And then, of course, I found myself remembering, once more, my recent encounter with her. I wanted to believe her that she only stayed away at her mother’s command and that she really did care for me the way I cared for her, but that she allowed me to grieve as I had without telling me she was all right was hard to deal with and on a night like that one, it was hard to know what to believe. Pushing the thought behind me, I climbed down the opposite side of the fence.

Once on the other side, I moved swiftly towards the buildings in the distance. I could not make them out clearly yet, but I had been told that the one I wanted was the middle one – an old yellow structure; all of metal, with much of the lab’s area being underground. As the sun began to crest the horizon, I could see it clearly.

The courtyard was large, though, and I had only made it halfway across when I heard the sound of the dogs. Panic-stricken, I looked up. There, coming directly towards me, I saw a pack of guard dogs. They were large, too, nearly wolves. I began to run for the shelter of the buildings, but they were closing in quickly. Alone in these woods, at the break of day, there was no one to help me. Adrenaline fueled my legs and I had nearly made it to the buildings before the dogs were upon me. One leapt and, though its jaws only caught the sleeve of my sweatshirt, it pulled me roughly to the ground. The others were on its heels.

Then, just as I abandoned hope, as I felt the dogs’ hot breath on my throat, another creature charged out from the dawning sky behind them – a great stag deer. The stag raised its huge hooves and kicked at the dogs nearest to it. Then, lowering its head, it charged at the dogs on top of me and threw them from me with its powerful antlers. Bending down, the deer allowed me to climb upon its back. Then, the big dogs chasing after it, and me bouncing upon its back, the deer raced into the yellow structure and down the wide stairs inside, past a birdcage that I’m sure must have been Nel’s and into a large complex of workshops in the basement. Battering down more than one locked door on its way, it finally stopped next to a large metallic dome, replete with wires and levers of all sorts protruding from it. The time-space disruptor, I was sure. Dismounting, I looked up at the stag and, suddenly, the truth of what he was dawned upon me. There, before me, the stag shook and quivered. Its hair began to fall out first, and then its flesh began peeling – the great beast was falling apart before my very eyes. I looked at the stag and I watched as it squeezed its large eyes tightly shut. Again and again it closed its eyes, but to no avail. I knew, then, who the stag was. And I knew that she had come too far.

“Avari,” I said, “you came to help me.”

The stag nodded and I heard Avari’s voice softly, “We’re not supposed to talk to humans when we’re animals, but I think it doesn’t matter now.”

I hugged the great snout before me. “Thank you for saving my life, Avari.”

“I am your friend, Sarah,” she said, “I want you to know that.”

I nodded. “I know, Avari.”

A howl of dogs behind her ended the exchange, however. “Quickly,” she said, “disable the machine. There is not much time before the dogs are upon you!”

Turning, I surveyed the amazing contraption. I had no notion of how a man could build such a thing. But, I was confident that I could destroy it. I grabbed the nearest set of wires with both hands and pulled. With a spark and a shock, they tore free. I raced around the machine, looking for exposed sections of its innards. I pulled and kicked every loose piece I could find. At last, I was rewarded with a plume of smoke coming from the device. Just as the dogs entered the room with me, the air shimmered and all manner of creatures appeared around me – elephants, lions, eagles, monkeys, snakes. The dogs turned and ran. Then, the creatures around me finished the dismantling of the time disruptor and, squinting, they vanished. When the smoke cleared and the clamor had ended, I looked for Avari. All that was left of the great stag was a skeleton. Overcome with grief, and not knowing what else to do, I picked up the skull.

Outside of the building, I tied the skull up, a salute to my friend. Perhaps it’s a silly thing to do – maybe like gluing pictures into a photo album, but you asked, and that is the answer. That’s why there is a stag’s skull hanging on this unusual yellow building.

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Well, there's my first ever EN Short Story Smackdown post :) I had a lot of fun writing it! I just hope it's not too full of typos since I pounded it out tonight and haven't had much proof-reading time.

Also, for what it's worth, I have no objection to EP's contribution standing despite the infraction of the 'rules as written'. If the judges ok it, I'm willing to give him whatever advantage there is to be gained by editing one's post four minutes after first submitting it :)
 

Thanks, but I'm assuming the odds are slim. I haven't read your post yet (just woke up and thought I'd go BEYOND the rules and wait until I get home tonight after the deadline to read it), but best of luck to you regardless.
 

Round 1 - Match 5

Ceramic DM - ENWorld Short Story Smackdown - Summer 07
Round 1 - Match 5 - Hellefire vs. Trench

Pure Heart
By Aaron Blair/Hellefire

“Peace, Love and Serenity!” purred a soft voice through the phone, invoking the good will of the White Priestess.

Erin rolled her eyes. “Mmph,” she replied indignantly, “coffee.” Why would anyone call her before she had had her coffee?

“Good morning, Sunshine!” the voice continued pleasantly, “And Happy Anniversary!”

Erin sighed. “You too, Katie. Peace and all that. After coffee.” Role-playing was fun and all, but you have to have your priorities. “Call you back in ten.”

Staggering slowly from bed, Erin stumbled into her family’s kitchen and turned on the coffee pot. After throwing some cold water on her face and stretching like a cat, she poured a cup and thought about the coming day.

The International Day of Peace didn’t mean a lot to her because of Peace, but she had met Katie on that day four years ago. It was such a strange meeting, too.

The White Priestesses joined with the local Baha’is every year to stage a peace parade. As accepting as the Baha’is were, the White Priestesses never told them of their actual beliefs – that a Mother Goddess existed and whom they worshipped, that they could heal all manners of illness, that there is another world, named Shangri-La, which they hope to open a doorway to. They simply helped with the decorations and marched in the parade, wishing peace and happiness to all.

Erin wasn’t particularly impressed with the theories of the White Priestesses, or of the other role-players for that matter. Some were fanciful, some were strange, and some were downright demented. As far as Erin could tell, they all just wanted to believe in something more interesting than politics, law and dentistry. At least the White Priestesses were pleasant with their ideas.

The phone rang, blaringly cutting the silence surrounding Erin’s musings. She jumped, and then reached over to pick up the receiver. “Hi!”

“Ten, twenty, what’s the difference?” asked the same voice, never losing a touch of its gentleness. “Sounds like you’ve gotten some caffeine. What time are you coming over?”

“I’m going to a thing at the Java Shoppe before the parade, so I need to make myself pretty. I’ll just meet you there.”

“Okay. We still on for flowering at the club tonight?”

Erin thought handing out white flowers at a rave was one of the most insane things they had ever done, but it was their anniversary after all. She tried to suppress a giggle, failed miserably, and nodded to the phone. “Absolutely! I’ll change into my initiation gown after the poetry.” She knew that the gown was only to be used for initiation into the White Priestesses, but loved to tease Katie about it.

“You’re almost as sweet as your brother, Erin! Speaking of which, is Mighty Mouse coming today?”

Erin’s younger brother, Konrad, was a Gray Wizard. He was also rather short, so Katie had come up with a fitting nickname for him. Most of the White Priestesses looked down on the Grays as being one step from evil. Grays considered themselves to be open to everything.

Erin thought about her brother. Konrad had been getting more and more moody lately. He had introduced her to this whole role-playing thing in the first place. He had been so excited and curious about it when he was younger. He had always talked to Erin about it because their parents would not have understood. Erin had accompanied Konrad to the peace parade four years ago so their parents would let him go, and met her best friend. She had actually been hoping to meet boys.

“Erin?” Katie’s voice prompted, ever-patiently, from the phone in her hand.

“Sorry, was just thinking about the little gray goober. I don’t know; I haven’t talked to him much lately.”

Katie’s voice sounded suddenly concerned. “You should try to talk to him. He might be slipping to, well, the other side.”

Erin laughed. “Or maybe he’s just a normal teenager, or there’s a girl or something. I’m going to get ready. See you on the hill.”

“OK sweetie. I have to go too, somebody’s at the door. Peace!”

Erin took a slow, hot shower and considered her wardrobe for the day. She was going to the Java Shoppe later, and decided her red ‘Beer & Poetry!’ shirt clashed nicely with her bright orange hair and went well with her tight jeans. Erin laughed, wondering how the White Priestesses ever accepted someone like her; she was never calm on the inside or the out.

‘Maybe I’ll try that spell again,’ Erin thought as she reached inside her secret cubby-hole for her spell book. She flipped it open to page three. One spell for each full year she had known Katie, with another coming today. In one more year, if she decided to take initiation, she would be taught more spells, and how to research her own. Katie’s mother was a White Priestess as well, so Katie had been learning her entire life. Her spell book was almost full, and Erin was a bit fascinated with it.

Erin studied the spell for a few minutes, remembering the exact pronunciations, intonations and gestures to accomplish it. It was similar to her first spell, which was just a poem really, but it was more intricate and had more of an effect. While her first spell simply helped her focus, and her second helped with hangovers, her third made her feel tingly and strangely calm. Erin had never really accepted this as magic, more like guided meditation. But it did work.

Closing her eyes, Erin moved her body in the required ways and allowed the words to swell in her throat then burst out of her mouth. In the middle of the spell, her body started feeling warm; a soothing warmth that started around her stomach and spread to her limbs and head. As the last syllable faded, tingles encompassed her as well, and her senses and mind cleared. It felt like being in Love, or eating a Swiss chocolate, combined with a perfect night of rest. It wasn’t coffee, but it sure came close.

Erin closed her spell book and put it back in its cubby. Better not to carry it to the poetry reading. Besides, she lived 10 minutes walk from campus and could pick it up afterwards. She wondered what new spell Katie would teach her today.

Choosing matching necklace and bracelet to complete her attire, Erin quietly closed her door and headed down the hall. She paused as she came to Konrad’s door. Where was the little squirt anyway? He had been hanging out with her less and less recently.

Erin knocked lightly on the door. No answer. Well, maybe he would meet them later. The Gray bunch attended events when they felt like it. She wondered briefly about Konrad’s spell book. How full was it, and what types of cantrips might it contain? She had never seen it, and assumed it was hidden somewhere near his Playboy collection.

The poetry reading at the Java Shoppe was rather predictable that day. Much about peace, and a few sarcastic pieces about war. A couple poems were rather insightful, but most were simply following the theme of the day. ‘At least they are trying,’ Erin thought benevolently as she slipped out the door.

Erin headed to campus, to the central quad where the parade would be gathered and starting any minute. She walked slowly to the top of the hill overlooking the quad. Katie traditionally met her at the top. She looked around, but Katie was nowhere in sight. Well, she was a couple minutes late – Katie probably didn’t want to keep everyone else waiting.

Erin went to the far side of the hill and looked down over the parade. It was just beginning to move, with Baha’is in the front surrounding their floats and symbols. The motif was always the same – white doves holding olive branches in their beaks. Other figures were decorated and carried to depict various historical personages who dealt in peace – Mother Teresa, Gandhi, the Dalai Lama, and so on. ((Picture_3.jpg – parade)) Behind the Baha’is would come the White Priestesses, smiling and wishing well to all. Erin looked, but the White Priestesses weren’t there. None of them.

Erin felt a twinge of uncertainty. The White Priestesses always took part in this parade. Surely Katie would have called her if something had happened. Erin felt strangely disconnected. Of all the things she felt confident in, the regularity of the White Priestesses, and Katie in particular, ranked highest. The sun might not come up this morning, but they would definitely be here. But they weren’t.

Erin ran down the hill and approached a Baha’i she had met last year. “Hey Barb,” she called, “have you seen Katie?”

Barbara smiled at her pleasantly. “Hey Erin! Nice to see one of you girls showed up. We were wondering if you all caught chicken pox or something. We haven’t seen any of you. Your help and presence is always so nice.”

Erin mumbled a quick “Thanks Barb” and ran toward Katie’s dorm. Where the hell was she?

Erin tried to calm herself on the way. What kind of White Priestess loses her composure at the first sign of something out of place? It did no good, and she didn’t have her spell book with her. She wasn’t nearly practiced enough to know the spell by heart.

Bounding up the stairs three at a time, Erin raced to Katie’s door and began pounding on it. “Katie, are you there? Katie! Open the door! What’s going on?”

The door to Katie’s room opened, showing a mass of White Priestesses. The head of the order, Katie’s mother, quietly asked Erin to come in and closed the door behind her.

“What’s going on?” Erin asked, feeling more scared by the second.

Katie’s mother, Vanessa, smiled at Erin gently. “Calm yourself, child. We think a matter of great importance has happened today, and you may well be a part of it. Well, your brother anyway.”

Konrad? What did he have to do with this?

“I haven’t seen my brother all day. Where is he? Is he ok? Where’s Katie? What great importance?”

“Be at ease. This is a Blessed day. You know of Shangri-La from our meetings and studies. You also know that our greatest hope is to open a gateway to that land. I have been researching the Way for most of my life, and have been teaching Katie to do likewise. I believe that my daughter has finally found the way.”

“Katie found the way to Shangri-La? Whoa. That’s great! So, um, is she there now? Is she coming back?”

“She called me this morning and told me she had found the Door. She said that the key had been brought to her by your brother. She mentioned his redemption, and that she would come home before the parade. If she did not, she said that she would be in Shangri-La, and that we should find her. She left her notes so that we could follow. We are almost done, we believe.”

Vanessa guided Erin to a chair and handed her some papers. “You are not yet initiated, but you are intrinsically tied to this through Katie and Konrad. And we may need that. You are welcome to come with us if you wish.”

Erin nodded, still feeling lost in all of this. Hands touched her shoulders as White Priestesses murmured words of support and cast various spells of peace. Erin felt herself calming, but still wondered if life would ever be normal again.

Vanessa leaned over Erin and showed her two sheets of old, dry paper. “These were written by Gray Wizards many years ago. One refers to the location of the Doors. Each order has their own outer plane they are trying to reach. We have always assumed that they were separate Doors to separate planes. However, if we cross-reference the Gray information your brother found, here, with the White information Katie was working on, here, you see…”

Erin looked at the newer piece of paper Vanessa was holding. Vanessa held the papers together, and then put a candle behind them. Erin watched the lines from the maps drawn on the papers match perfectly, leading from one to the other.

“We had never considered information sharing, “Vanessa laughed wryly, “for each of the orders sticks to their own. Of course, we still have one missing piece to the puzzle.” Vanessa placed her fingertip on the combined maps, showing that just as the White map the ended, where the Gray map began, the Gray map also ended.

“What piece is that,” Erin asked.

“There is but one more order,” Vanessa answered. She gave Erin a few seconds to absorb this information.

“But, Katie told me that the White Priestesses would have nothing to do with the Black. They are corrupt and twisted, and cannot be saved.”

“So we thought,” Vanessa said softly. “We may have been wrong.” Vanessa handed Erin the other sheet of dried paper.

Erin read slowly. “The same Doorways may be used by each order to reach their particular outer plane. The spells are even the same; it is simply the mind and heart of the caster that decides which plane opens. After the Door is open, only followers of the correct order may enter, using an order-specific spell. Of course, the mind and heart of the caster must be as one with the spell for entering as well, thus are separate orders kept from other’s planes even if they know other’s spells. There is but one exception. While the Whites accept the freedom of the Grays, they continue in their attempts to ‘Save’ the Blacks. It is written in the Chronicles of the White that ‘While normally only the Cleansed may enter Shangri-La, it is possible for a Diseased to enter and be saved. To do so, the Pure Heart must enter as one with the Corrupt Mind.’ These theories have been composed by myself and one of our order who chose to become White and has been trying to convert me as well. We cannot test these theories without the aid of a Black, and that is problematic. Signed: Stephan the Gray. 1814.”

Erin thought for a moment, trying to understand all that she had read. “What are the Chronicles of the White?” she asked.

Vanessa sighed. “The White order kept their combined knowledge recorded in a great text for hundreds of years. It was kept and protected for many generations, but in the Second World War it was lost or destroyed. We have been trying to piece together the lost information ever since. This is one of the few direct quotes we have found.”

“Bleh. That sucks. So why are you here instead of following Katie?”

“It took us a couple hours to put the pieces together. Now, we are at a loss. Notice the map ends? Well, as I said, there is only one other order.”

“So you have to find a Black to help you? You don’t have any records of their information?”

“The Blacks don’t keep records. While we kept a single great chronicle, the Grays keep individual notes, and the Blacks have rituals. They pass information along through formalized sessions. At least, that’s the theory.”

“So how could Katie find the Door without the help of a Black?” Erin asked.

“She couldn’t.”

“Um. Wow. So, Katie, Konrad, and a Black? This gets even more twisted.”

“Actually,” Vanessa said slowly, “Katie only mentioned herself and your brother. How well do you know your brother?”

Erin was mortified. “Konrad? We, we, well we used to be really close. He’s been, well, distant lately, but that’s normal. He’s a good kid! There’s no chance that he, that he could, no!” Erin was stammering, defensive and at the same time deeply worried by the implied accusation.

“Calm down,” Vanessa soothed, “if he is still Gray all is well. If he has turned to Black, Katie was surely seeking to Save him. Perhaps he merely learned something from a Black trying to convert him. Either way, things will be ok.”

Erin took several minutes to compose herself. Konrad was clever; maybe he did learn something Black, but he surely couldn’t have become Black.

“Actually,” Vanessa continued,” I was hoping you could help with the final part of the map. However Konrad came by the last bit of information, I thought maybe your connection to him may help you recreate the last steps.”

“How?” Erin asked.

Vanessa sighed. “I don’t know, but I’m at a loss where else to go with this.”

Erin nodded. “If I can help, I will.”

The White Priestesses followed their map to its end, which showed the area of the city where the Door was located. As luck would have it, this was within the university campus. From there, the Gray map showed the direction to follow, to the entrance of the subterranean maze where the Door was hidden. They found the entrance to the underground at the bottom level of the university library, through an old hinged trapdoor under piles of uncatalogued books and crates. After wrestling the door open, two White Priestesses stepped into the darkness, and found several torches stacked in a pile. They continued to the end of the Gray map, and stood in front of a shadowy underground maze.

Vanessa looked at Erin. “Here we are lost, for I am sure finding our way to the end will take more than luck.”

Erin closed her eyes and tried to feel for Konrad. After a couple of minutes she opened her eyes, feeling foolish. “I’m not sure what I can do. I suck at mazes. The last time we had a maze in the game Konrad was running, I spent 2 hours getting lost and coming back to the beginning until I found that rhyme with directions through…”

Erin looked at Vanessa. “It can’t be that simple. But. Let me see if I can remember it.” She began muttering to herself. ‘Three to the right, straight to the light, left around the bend, then do it again. Right, left, right, left, straight, straight, straight, straight, straight. Go straight up, through the cup, be sure to watch your weight. Half-way down, grab the line, swing on through, check the time. Hard left, soft right, quick stop, jump tight.’ “OK, got it. I had to memorize that damn thing to complete the dungeon. I thought it was kind of dumb. So, that’s Black magic??”

Vanessa handed Erin a torch. “Slowly,” she warned. “I have a feeling this is dangerous.”

Erin kept repeating the simple steps to herself as she led the White Priestesses down the first three turns to the right, then continued straight past other turns. They came to four unlit torches placed in sconces on the walls. At the next intersection, she took them left, through a curving tunnel. At the next turn, she went right and repeated the pattern. Again, the three right turns. Again, the torches set in the wall. Again, the curving left tunnel. All the time, the floor was sloping steadily downward.

Erin went through the next verse in her head as she came to more intersecting passageways. She turned right, then left, then right again, then left again. She carefully counted the next five crossings, and then looked for a staircase. They came to a dead end, and milled around trying to figure out what went wrong.

“Are you sure you counted right?” Vanessa asked.

“Yes,” Erin answered, “I was very careful. And I remember the staircase in Konrad’s maze.”

“But,” Vanessa said, “the rhyme doesn’t say anything about the layout of the maze other than directions. Are we sure we are looking for stairs?”

The White Priestesses examined the area for a few minutes until one found a hole in the wall, about eight feet off the floor. After helping each other up, they continued. The hole opened into a tunnel, which led into and out of a cup-shaped depression. On the other side was a rope bridge. Heeding the instructions, they crossed one at a time. On the other side of the bridge they found a ladder going down.

Erin handed her torch to a Priestess and started climbing down the ladder. After a moment, she cried out. “The ladder ends! I stepped into space!”

Again repeating the rhyme, Erin looked for a line, and found a rope hanging from the bottom rung of the ladder. “Found it,” she yelled, “watch your step.” She slowly put her weight on the rope, and then tried swinging. Slowly at first, then harder, she found an opening in the wall and swung through.

Erin waited for the White Priestesses to join her. She couldn’t help but smile to herself. She was having fun with this. It was like actually hunting treasure!

The procession continued through the passage. There was suddenly a loud ‘Whoosh’ sound directly in front of Erin, and her torch was knocked from her hand by a swinging blade! She jumped back in fear, directly into Vanessa.

Vanessa held Erin and comforted her. “Shhh. It’s ok. All is as it should be.” Exactly a minute later, the blade swung through the wall and across the passage again.

“Ah!” Vanessa proclaimed, “Now I see. We must time this.”

To be safe, the White Priestesses only used 30 seconds of the 60 available between each deadly swing, and safely crossed the trap. They continued, very slowly.

The next intersection was composed of seven different tunnels. Erin carefully recited the rhyme in her head, and chose the one 90 degrees to the left. The next intersection was the same, and she chose the one 45 degrees to the right. Then she screamed.

Vanessa and another Priestess grabbed Erin just as she began falling into the open pit in the floor, and dragged her back above the lip. Erin scrambled back, then curled into a ball on the floor and cried. Vanessa held her head and cast five soothing and mental/emotional healing spells. Erin slowly composed herself.

“That sucked,” she said, as she wiped her tear-streaked face and laughed humorlessly. “I don’t know how much more of this I can take.”

“We should be almost there,” Vanessa said, “only one more part. ‘Jump tight.’ What can that mean? What did it mean in Konrad’s dungeon?”

“I had to take short hops to avoid swords sticking up from the ground,” Erin answered. “I don’t see any swords here though.”

Vanessa pondered for a moment. “Maybe we can avoid more unpleasant surprises.” She took a torch and threw it past the pit. It skidded along the floor, and then disappeared into a second pit. “Ah hah!”

The White Priestesses and Erin took turns jumping over the pit, helping each other to avoid any falls. They repeated the torch-throwing process, and found a third pit. After the third pit, the floor was solid for about 20 feet, and the passage turned right. They followed it, and when they turned the corner they stopped and stared in awe.

The rough floor and walls of the tunnel became smooth, almost to the point of polished. At the end of the passage was a wall made of close-fitted stone blocks. In the wall was an open door, topped by the Infinity sign of the Three, showing them what could only be Shangri-La. Past a pleasant hedge maze stood an imitation of Stonehenge. Or perhaps the original. Past the monument a huge, blazing sun was setting. Above the setting sun was a beautiful night sky, with amazingly-brilliant stars, new constellations, and a crescent moon. A sign just past the doorway said, simply, ‘Elsewhere.’ Sitting on the foot of the doorway laid Katie’s open spell book. ((Picture_2.jpg – Door))

The White Priestesses all started talking and chanting. Vanessa turned to Erin and hugged her tightly. “You did it! Great job!” She then ran over a scooped up Katie’s spell book, and then started dancing.

“Look! Here it is! The spell! To travel to Shangri-La!” Tears were streaming down Vanessa’s face. She turned to Erin. “Child. Go get your initiation gown, if you want to continue farther. Only the Cleansed may enter. It will take me an hour or two to decipher and learn this spell. Also, bring your spell book.”

Erin left the White Priestesses to their chanting and ran back the way she had come. This was suddenly exciting again! She caught herself before she plunged into the first pit in the floor, and carefully made her way back out of the maze. Less than an hour later, she climbed back into the library, left through the front door, and ran home.

Erin’s parents were out of town for the weekend, so there was no need to slow down upon entering the house. She ran through the hallway towards her room, and then came to a dead stop.

Konrad’s door was open. Konrad’s door was never open. Ever since his parents allowed him to start locking it when he was ten, he had kept it carefully closed and locked at all times. He never even opened the door when someone else was in the hallway. Erin had always thought it was pre-teen hormones or some privacy issue, but had never given it much thought. The sight of his door, now open, somehow made Erin feel apprehensive.

Erin slowly reached out and opened the door further. Inside, the room was meticulously clean. There were a couple of paintings and a mirror on the wall, and everything was in place. Everything except a disheveled stack of papers on the desk. Drawn to the desk, Erin sat down and started leafing through the papers. There were notes on Gray magic, on spells and spell research, and on the freedom of the Gray Way. Deeper into the pile she found notes about Black magic, on how the Gray Wizards believed the Blacks to operate. Even further down she found notes regarding Grays turning to White or Black. She stopped when she came to a bound notebook, entitled ‘Konrad’s Treatise on Darkening and Control.’

Hands trembling, Erin picked up the manuscript. The beginning pages were something of an autobiography, telling of Konrad’s childhood and search for freedom, and power. Erin’s body was shaking badly as she read ever-darker ideas about life that had lived in her brother’s mind and come to light in this text. She turned to a page near the back, and gasped in shock as she saw a picture of Katie, bound and fearful-eyed. Underneath the picture were diagrams including bondage, mutilation and dissection.

On the next page was glued a clipping from ‘Haiku Monthly.’ It read ‘A bird let free and flying. Gilded cage no more. Is yet a bird in meaning.’ Underneath the clipping, in Konrad’s messy scrawl, was written ‘And so too a heart.’

With horror, Erin turned to the last page in the journal and glanced down at the picture. And screamed before her mind closed off the world. ((Picture_1.jpg – Girl)) The Pure Heart had indeed gone to open the Door.
 

Avatar_V said:
Well, there's my first ever EN Short Story Smackdown post :) I had a lot of fun writing it! I just hope it's not too full of typos since I pounded it out tonight and haven't had much proof-reading time.

Also, for what it's worth, I have no objection to EP's contribution standing despite the infraction of the 'rules as written'. If the judges ok it, I'm willing to give him whatever advantage there is to be gained by editing one's post four minutes after first submitting it :)

Well.I have never been a huge "play by the rules" girl (chaotic good). I prefer to go on a case by case basis. I'm going to bow to my cohort's superior experience in this matter.

I should have judgements written by Saturday.
 

Round 1

And so, a round is finished.

6 matches, 11 stories, one withdrawal.

Judges, be gentle :)

Off to read and comment on last two matches of round 1 now.

Good luck all!

Aaron
 

I have finished my own comments for Round 1. Please don't take offense at criticisms, they are meant to be constructive. Also, I am not as thorough as some of the judges (or as I would be if I were judging) - I post my basic thoughts. And, jsut to re-emphasize the fact, I'm about 50-50 on these, so don't feel bad if I picked your competitor (or too confident if I picked you :)). These are meant to help - I know I certainly need more feedback on my stories to improve my style and technique.

Grats on getting round 1 done, good luck to all competitors, and I'll hopefully see whoever survives the neck-slicing of the judges in round 2 :).

Aaron

p.s. And in case I didn't mention it, you're all going down before the might of my pen (ok word processor) anyway!
 

Regarding the editing of posts - I am not a judge, nor am I in that particular match. Simply my thoughts on the subject:

The rule has always been stated clearly and firmly, and for good reason. That being said, I have had problems with formatting in the past as well, and we all want our stories to look good. I think the rule should stand in spirit, but maybe t\wit ha provision that editing within 5 or 10 minutes might be ok. I think there should be a line, and dire consequences for crossing that line so that it not get out of hand, but maybe we can change the rule to reflect that, in the future. For this instance, well, *I* don't think it was violating the spirit of the rule. But, again, I am not a judge, would not think to tell them how to rule on anything, and respect however they decide to handle it.

On that note, let me thank the judges (without a hint of brown-nosing mind you) for volunteering their time and efforts for this. CDM would not be possible without their fair, impartial and timely decisions and insightful feedback. (And if any of you come to Poland, the beer's on me! j/k).

Aaron
 

Hellefire said:
I have finished my own comments for Round 1. Please don't take offense at criticisms, they are meant to be constructive. Also, I am not as thorough as some of the judges (or as I would be if I were judging) - I post my basic thoughts.
Are your comments posted somewhere or will we have to wait until all judges have completed their evaluation? :uhoh: :)
 

And, in case I haven't sucked enough of the spaces on this post, I want to say hi to all the old faces I haven't seen in a while, especially those not competing at the moment:

Orchid Blossom
carpedavid
Berandor
PC
Goldmoon

And a ton of others that I'm missing. Problems with my lifestyle and my memory :).

Miss you guys/girls.

Aaron
 

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