Fall Ceramic DM - Final Round Judgment Posted!

[Piratecat]

Yup, it looks like Sparky made it just under the wire. Yay!

That was a fun, close match with SteelDraco. I can go any time you want to match me with someone; sooner is fine.

I absolutely agree with the judges that my use of the bronze statue face (detail.jpg) was the weakest of my photo use. It had played a larger role in a previous version of the story where the millipede poison petrified people, but I really didn't think the story was as strong with the supernatural flavor. Excising all of that made it much more interesting to me but left me with one weaker photo.

It's interesting how themes evolve that pull together a tale. I hadn't even considered the use of Jabberwocky as a framing device, but I was lying in bed early on the third morning and trying to think of a way to make the silverware more relevant. Could we go on a cannibalism theme and she uses it to cut out his heart? Maybe she could cut off his head instea. . . and *snap*, I thought of vorpal swords and the rest fell into place. I'm glad it came out pretty close to how I envisioned it.

 

[Sparky]

Oh... phew! I had 4:00 locked in my head. I didn't actually notice that the pics went up at 4:12.

What a relief!

I'm glad it was just posting panic (which I seem quite susceptible to).



And I consider my story's length an outpouring of love for the judges.

 

[Berandor]

Oohoohoo, Love hurts!

Piratecat: How did you format your flashbacks?

 

[Piratecat]

Piratecat: How did you format your flashbacks?

I used the {indent} and {/indent} commands (replacing the {} with [], of course.) If you do this, it's worth remembering that indent places an extra carriage return following the last indented line. In order to avoid too much blank space, place the next line of the story immediately following the last indented line, with no intervening carriage return.

 

[MarauderX]

That was a fun, close match with SteelDraco. I can go any time you want to match me with someone; sooner is fine.

I think that someone is me, and soon is fine with me also, with tomorrow AM being the be$t, if you know what I mean. I'll take any edge I can against the infamous PC!

Thanks for the comments judges, each helps tremendously. Also I will be spending a lot more time polishing what I put together this round since there will be no RL time pressure.

I thought about concluding my story with an Ann Rice Interview with a Vampire finish, but didn't have the time and thought it might weaken the ending. I should have used the picture of the woman as the marilith's disguise instead of her true form, but for me the hat was too distinct to be 'common'.

I look forward to our match, and it's time to take the kitten gloves off. Grrr!

 

[SteelDraco]

Thanks for the comments, all - some very helpful stuff in here. I'll try and keep that in mind in the future. I had a good time doing this, though I knew as soon as I read PKitty's entry that I was done. I look forward to seeing what everybody comes up with as the competition progresses.

 

[Piratecat]

I think that someone is me, and soon is fine with me also, with tomorrow AM being the be$t, if you know what I mean. I'll take any edge I can against the infamous PC!

Don't worry, my friend. If your story is really good, I'll just ban you for a week or so.

Let's hear it for gratuitously abusing power!

 

[RangerWickett]

Hear hear!

 

[BigTom]

You know, when I had this as a Word document, there was lovely paragraphs. When I pasted it over, it looked ok. When I posted it, everything mashed together.

Sigh.

 

[Piratecat]

It happens to everyone once, BigTom. On the "no judges" thread I posted some suggestions of ways to make formatting easier. Worth reading if you found this enough fun to do again in the future.

BSF, take a look at those - if you think they have any value, maybe toss 'em into the Ceramic DM FAQ.