Stat this up # 1

[Nookie]

works for me

 

[freyar]

Tactics: Gorri shroomlings stay removed from active combat, creating Fighting Fungi to serve as their proxies in melee. Then they hang back, supporting their urdin followers with Battle Spores and healing.

 

[Cleon]

Tactics: Gorri shroomlings stay removed from active combat, creating Fighting Fungi to serve as their proxies in melee. Then they hang back, supporting their urdin followers with Battle Spores and healing.

Removing themselves from melee is an aspiration rather than a fact, suggesting the "stay" should have a "try" or "prefer" before it. Not so sure about the "remove" either, since it'd mean they're already in combat and are trying to leave it. Overall, using "avoid" would seem better.

I'd also use "shroomling allies" instead of "urdin followers", since they may be part of a ring with other gorri shroomlings.

Come to think of it, there's usually only a single gorri in a circle of urdin shroomling, so maybe we should phrase the tactics for a singular gorri.

We should also use lower case for the spore names, for the sake of consistency.

E.g.:

A Gorri shroomling tries to avoid active combat, creating fighting fungi to serve as its proxies in melee. The gorri hangs back, supporting shroomling allies with battle spores and healing.

 

[freyar]

Not "remove" as a verb, but "removed" as an adjective, meaning "remote; separate; not connected with; distinct from." See here. So I like "stay removed" or "try to stay removed" if you insist. Other than that, I like your changes well enough.

 

[Nookie]

changes look food to me as well.

 

[Cleon]

Not "remove" as a verb, but "removed" as an adjective, meaning "remote; separate; not connected with; distinct from." See here. So I like "stay removed" or "try to stay removed" if you insist. Other than that, I like your changes well enough.

The substance of my objection is that the proposed wording says the gorri is in a particular condition (e.g. outside combat) and I don't much care for description/tactics that limit what the monster in question is doing when encountered.

The gorri might well be within melee range when encountered, after all.

 

[Cleon]

changes look food to me as well.

Well I suppose it's not surprising something three apples high looks edible to you...

 

[Nookie]

I'm doing my gargamel impression seemed he always wanted to eat those smurfs or make them into gold or whatever.

 

[freyar]

Well, generally I agree with you, Cleon, but I don't want to be obsessive about it. Will this address your concerns?

Tactics: When possible, a gorri shroomling stays removed from active combat, creating fighting fungi to serve as its proxies in melee. Then it hangs back, supporting shroomling allies with battle spores and healing.

 

[Cleon]

Well, generally I agree with you, Cleon, but I don't want to be obsessive about it. Will this address your concerns?

Tactics: When possible, a gorri shroomling stays removed from active combat, creating fighting fungi to serve as its proxies in melee. Then it hangs back, supporting shroomling allies with battle spores and healing.

The first line is fine, but I'd like it to have something in the next lines about what it does when it's not supporting allies.

How about:

When possible, a gorri shroomling stays removed from active combat, creating fighting fungi to serve as its proxies in melee. It hangs back to cast magic, spores and quills, often supporting shroomling allies with battle spores and healing.