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I will grant that that example from Paizo is a heck of a sentence. They probably tried to do too much with it. And that sentence should probably have been edited more harshly - but then again, maybe that's the style they were going for?Ycore Rixle said:But those aren't nitpicks. Avoiding redundancy is an accepted rule of writing. Avoiding unnecessary adjectives - and they almost all are - is another accepted rule. Voltaire said, "The adjective is the enemy of the noun." There are tons of other quotes out there along the same lines, like Stephen King saying that the road to hell is paved with adverbs. My comments are far from personal preferences. There are real, accepted rules of style that are being violated in the RPG industry all the time.
But when you talk about accepted rules of style - accepted by who? Saying that there is a single accepted set of rules for style is ridiculous. If the WotC editors establish their own rules of style to be used in 4E, those are the only rules of style that matter.
You may not like it, but you cannot claim any degree of objectivity here. Regardless of how many big names agree with you - I'm sure I could dredge up some big-name authors who love adjectives if I tried. But this is all about style, which is inherently subjective. Using adjectives to modify nouns is correct in English grammar. Saying that using adjectives violates some rule of style is...I don't know...wonky?
I'm not a professional writer, but I took my share of English courses in university, and I certainly don't recall learning about these universal "rules of style" you posit.
And I apologize to everyone else for the thread derail.