Nightfall said:
Btw Don, what exactly about the writing don't you like? Which books do you have?
I apologize terribly if this is considered a thread hijack. I don't mean to, just wanna talk.
Currently, I own: Relics & Rituals I and II, Scarred Lands: Ghelspad, and Creature Collection II.
I
love Relics & Rituals I and II. No complaints, and if there are things I dislike, the quality of the ideas are enough to make me forget them.
It happened with
Ghelspad. I've tried, honestly sat down and tried to read this book over and over. It's difficult. I've tried to get through the section on Albadia, but the writing is bland. I like Scarred Lands, so it's with regret that I feel this way. Word choice, passive voice, subject-verb agreement, poor editing... it reads (as my wife pointed out) like a college student newspaper.
Maybe I'm being harsh, and I might be. Yet, why can't I get through the book? In places it's plain painful to read. As an example, I took my Sharpie and started editing some of the paragraphs. You should see the section on Fangsfall.
