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EN World Short Story Smackdown - FINAL: Berandor vs Piratecat - The Judgment Is In!
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Thorod Ashstaff
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Dibs!
Okay, I get dibs on THAT plot idea (IF, of course, I make it to the second round...).
Seriously, glad you are unhurt, Arwink!
Dlsharrock said:
Okay, I get dibs on THAT plot idea (IF, of course, I make it to the second round...).
Seriously, glad you are unhurt, Arwink!
maxfieldjadenfox
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Dlsharrock said:
Probably having the in-laws for tea is the worst of the lot...
Seriously, glad you're OK Arwink.I suggest a spin-off of SSS- everyone writes a story with the subtitle The Curse of Ceramic DM. IMHO, the curse started back with the great post fire, but it may have started before that- that was just the first time I was directly impacted.
Berandor
lunatic
Some (really short) notes on what I've read so far:
tadk:
[sblock]I really like the idea of your "story", but to me it didn't really work. When I get drawn into this strange fugue world where your normal stories live, I sometimes wish for a little more structure. This, however, was too structured, too matter-of-factly for me. I didn't feel dread, or surprise or some other typical CDM emotion.[/sblock]
Piratecat:
[sblock]Great story. Short, succint, not a lot of fat to trim. The title is perhaps the best thing of it. I imagine finding this recording in the attic, long after the brother moved out... Of course, the pictures flowed together very organically, even the fiery red whatever.[/sblock]
Orchid Blossom:
[sblock]A mythical story that I enjoyed very much, but I didn't get everything in my first reading. I'll have to re-read more closely – but I want to. Your story reminded me of good entries by tadk, somewhat dream-like, our of this world. It was uch easier to forget that I was reading a story than the usual CDM story of paranormal investigators written in first person point of view
Good luck against Piratecat, though - as usual.[/sblock]
Mythago:
[sblock]I must say this story left me a little confused. It may have been too wacky, though I find it hard to believe I wrote that. On the other hand, the names and the dialogue was really funny. Looking for Mister Right, the Chippendale Boys, and so on. Fun![/sblock]
maxfieldjadenfox:
[sblock]I was disappointed with the second half, as suddenly we're with the sidekicks of the tale. And Draco was gone faster than he appeared, which gave this story a really rushed feeling. And the plane... was kind of a stretch. On the other hand, the beginning was really good, up until the plane escape, really. Oh well, maybe next time you won't get sick and the whole story will be like this.[/sblock]
tadk:
[sblock]I really like the idea of your "story", but to me it didn't really work. When I get drawn into this strange fugue world where your normal stories live, I sometimes wish for a little more structure. This, however, was too structured, too matter-of-factly for me. I didn't feel dread, or surprise or some other typical CDM emotion.[/sblock]
Piratecat:
[sblock]Great story. Short, succint, not a lot of fat to trim. The title is perhaps the best thing of it. I imagine finding this recording in the attic, long after the brother moved out... Of course, the pictures flowed together very organically, even the fiery red whatever.[/sblock]
Orchid Blossom:
[sblock]A mythical story that I enjoyed very much, but I didn't get everything in my first reading. I'll have to re-read more closely – but I want to. Your story reminded me of good entries by tadk, somewhat dream-like, our of this world. It was uch easier to forget that I was reading a story than the usual CDM story of paranormal investigators written in first person point of view
Good luck against Piratecat, though - as usual.[/sblock]Mythago:
[sblock]I must say this story left me a little confused. It may have been too wacky, though I find it hard to believe I wrote that. On the other hand, the names and the dialogue was really funny. Looking for Mister Right, the Chippendale Boys, and so on. Fun![/sblock]
maxfieldjadenfox:
[sblock]I was disappointed with the second half, as suddenly we're with the sidekicks of the tale. And Draco was gone faster than he appeared, which gave this story a really rushed feeling. And the plane... was kind of a stretch. On the other hand, the beginning was really good, up until the plane escape, really. Oh well, maybe next time you won't get sick and the whole story will be like this.
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maxfieldjadenfox
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Berandor said:Some (really short) notes on what I've read so far:
maxfieldjadenfox:
[sblock]I was disappointed with the second half, as suddenly we're with the sidekicks of the tale. And Draco was gone faster than he appeared, which gave this story a really rushed feeling. And the plane... was kind of a stretch. On the other hand, the beginning was really good, up until the plane escape, really. Oh well, maybe next time you won't get sick and the whole story will be like this.
Thanks, Patrick. I am pretty disappointed in myself for this one, but sometimes real life gets in the way of art. I'm seriously considering retooling it at some point, without the constraints of the pictures.
Thorod Ashstaff
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maxfieldjadenfox said:
What part of the "dibs" concept are you not understanding? ;-)
(That siad, I think it's a great idea, but not until AFTER the final round...)
