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Need help making sure my novel's original

I'm writing a time travel cyberpunk pirate romance novel. In an effort to make sure I don't do anything particularly cliched or unoriginal, I'd like to solicit from you what you would expect to see in such a novel. The basic premise:

When his friend Afi calls for help from a politically volatile state, part-time pirate and secretive cyber-celebrity Jaime Adricks braves a nation on the brink of civil war in order to save this woman he once loved, but to reach her he must accept the aid of a mysterious local woman who spied for the Allies in World War II, battle Nazis on the 17th century Caribbean sea, and piece together a mystery hidden by the most advanced artificial intelligence in the world, which just happens to moonlight as an immortal demon from the dawn of time.

Help me make sure I don't fall into the rut of doing what's expected. Many thanks.
 

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I'm writing a time travel cyberpunk pirate romance novel. In an effort to make sure I don't do anything particularly cliched or unoriginal, I'd like to solicit from you what you would expect to see in such a novel.

What would I expect, if I read that on the back cover of a book? Honestly?

I'd expect to see a story written by someone trying to shore up poor plotting, characterization, and wordsmithing with every genre element they can stuff in. I'd expect to see a "Mary Sue" style main character, and stilted dialog.

Not that your writing is that way, but that's what I'd expect to see given that description. It is a marketing thing - like trying to sell me on a movie by telling me it has a big special effects budget. Your novel can have all those things in it, and be good. But having all those things does nothing at all to make it good, if you catch my meaning.

It is an error to think you avoid cliche by stacking on elements until you've hit a new combination. That just means you have more elements, each of which can still be cliched. Cliche isn't in what tropes the story contains, but in how each of those tropes is applied. So, it is also an error to think you can convince me you avoid cliche by displaying how many elements you're using.

What you've told me is that you've got a huge bunch of tropes, but you haven't told me you know how to use even one of them well. All this focus on the wizbang makes me expect that the wizbang is the focus of the piece - as opposed to, say, characterization or plot.
 

I had a previous post that was eaten. Suffice to say I agree with Umbran. Keep your novel simple.

Focus your attention on Jaime Adricks and the world he lives in.

I rather like the civil war angle and Nazi combo. Dieselpunk?
 

What Umbran said.

Next to the short blurb, do you have a short chapter to share with us?

Originality isn't the most important thing if you want to people to enjoy your creation. It's mostly just presentation.
 

I'm writing a time travel cyberpunk pirate romance novel.
When his friend Afi calls for help from a politically volatile state, part-time pirate and secretive cyber-celebrity Jaime Adricks braves a nation on the brink of civil war in order to save this woman he once loved, but to reach her he must accept the aid of a mysterious local woman who spied for the Allies in World War II, battle Nazis on the 17th century Caribbean sea, and piece together a mystery hidden by the most advanced artificial intelligence in the world, which just happens to moonlight as an immortal demon from the dawn of time.

Cliche!
;)

Honestly, it actually sounds like a TORG or superhero adventure...not so much for a novel. It also treads a little closely to some of the work of Harry Turtledove and S.M. Stirling- masters of Alt-History SF and at least one episode of the Twilight Zone. Maybe even Moorcock's Dancers at the End of Time stories...

That said, you have some elements in there that could actually work together well, but you have too many of them. As my creative writing prof once said "K.I.S.S.: Keep It Simple, Stupid!"

For instance, picking some elements out of there, I could easily see a storyline like: A Berlin Stormtrooper in Blackbeard's Ship. (Sorry, Mark Twain!) Except serious.
 

Thanks for the comments. Believe me, I've had the same concerns you've raised, but I think I manage to unroll the multiple aspects of the narrative well enough so that it makes sense and draws you on without ruining your suspension of disbelief.

Edited to remove the sample chapter.
 
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I have three words for you...

Research, Research, Research!

Do research until your eyes bleed.

Other than that, I'd say "ask Ari."
 



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