Wow! I can't believe this! Thanks to all the reviewers!

[Ed Cha]

As for the swearing/cursing issue, I'd go with a creative way of swearing, by using new words. Something like "That son of a cibht stole my pouch" is wrong, but "that cow-butt faced slug just stole my pouch" is less likely to get Eric's grandma some ulcers.

Cibht? LOL.

 

[Conaill]

Originally posted by Conaill

How about "she tries to cover herself with her hands, in a feint attempt at modesty"?
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That might be an easy way to describe it. Thanks.

Actually, I do like Hairy Minotaur's version better. Didn't see it yet when I posted mine...

 

[Hairy Minotaur]

So, they don't engage in lesbianism or eat children?

now that i've got the book in front of me, it's an encounter with a marilith, 2 alu-fiens, and a succubus. here is the succubus's write up:

"She pretends to be under a vow of silence and merely smiles mysteriously at characters if addressed. Lynnara is staggeringly vain (although with good reason) and expects a steady stream of compliments. So long as these are forthcoming, all will be well; if they are withheld for any reason, she will begin flirting with, and tempting, player characters until they respond with suitable attentions."

 

[Buttercup]

Ed, BBEG=Big, Bad, Evil Genius.

I think the suggestions here have been great. They have showed how to describe some things in a manner that will be quite clear to adults, but will go right over the heads of any innocent kids. Also, in my experience, images are far more likely to raise hackles (including my own) than text. So just don't include any artwork of the demon eating her sexual partners, and you should be fine. Seriously, the way you have described your product, I wouldn't hesitate to add it to the collection in my library, unless the images were too graphic or gratuitous.

 

[Ed Cha]

now that i've got the book in front of me, it's an encounter with a marilith, 2 alu-fiens, and a succubus. here is the succubus's write up:

"She pretends to be under a vow of silence and merely smiles mysteriously at characters if addressed. Lynnara is staggeringly vain (although with good reason) and expects a steady stream of compliments. So long as these are forthcoming, all will be well; if they are withheld for any reason, she will begin flirting with, and tempting, player characters until they respond with suitable attentions."

Eh, sounds kinda weak to me. Who wrote this thing? Just kidding. I'm sure it's great.

I guess the word "breasts", "sex", "lesbianism", "children-eating", and "sh*t" are out from the general consensus I'm getting here. That's fine as I think with all your help, I got an idea on what kind of an approach to take! Thanks especially to Hairy Minotaur for the wonderful verbage.

Please be sure to check out the Publisher's Forum for the announcement on the product which should be within the next week.

 

[Hairy Minotaur]

Eh, sounds kinda weak to me. Who wrote this thing? Just kidding. I'm sure it's great.

I guess the word "breasts", "sex", "lesbianism", "children-eating", and "sh*t" are out from the general consensus I'm getting here. That's fine as I think with all your help, I got an idea on what kind of an approach to take! Thanks especially to Hairy Minotaur for the wonderful verbage.

Please be sure to check out the Publisher's Forum for the announcement on the product which should be within the next week.

Awesome! Can't wait. What's the page count looking like?

 

[Ed Cha]

Ed, BBEG=Big, Bad, Evil Genius.

I think the suggestions here have been great. They have showed how to describe some things in a manner that will be quite clear to adults, but will go right over the heads of any innocent kids. Also, in my experience, images are far more likely to raise hackles (including my own) than text. So just don't include any artwork of the demon eating her sexual partners, and you should be fine. Seriously, the way you have described your product, I wouldn't hesitate to add it to the collection in my library, unless the images were too graphic or gratuitous.

I'm glad I've got your approval, Buttercup! I think I'll go for a subtle approach and yet try to preserve the integrity of the characters in all their foul mouthed and sexed-up badness.

As for the artwork, there shouldn't be anything too out there. The cover has a swamp "demon-goddess" covering herself a bit, but no nippage (my specific instructions to the artist Storn Cook).

I hope it can be one of those books that when you read as a younger person, you don't get it, but go back and read it when you're older and get a laugh or kick out of the text then.

By the way, Buttercup, I just picked up my photos from Gen Con and I see the one I took of you with your gorgeous smile right here! I'll be sure to have them up on the Web site in a couple of days and post a link here, so you can check them out. E-mail me your address and I'll mail the actual photo to you, if you'd like.

 

[Ed Cha]

Awesome! Can't wait. What's the page count looking like?

I'm shooting for 64 pages, but it'll probably go over again and I'll have to ask Doug to jam everything into 72 pages like with The Hamlet of Thumble.

I don't know honestly. If that happens again though, we may try to put it in 80 or 96 pages, so people don't complain that it's packed too tight with text.

 

[Crothian]

I'm shooting for 64 pages, but it'll probably go over again and I'll have to ask Doug to jam everything into 72 pages like with The Hamlet of Thumble.

I don't know honestly. If that happens again though, we may try to put it in 80 or 96 pages, so people don't complain that it's packed too tight with text.

Doug does good layout, so you are in good hands in that department.

 

[Hairy Minotaur]

I'm shooting for 64 pages, but it'll probably go over again and I'll have to ask Doug to jam everything into 72 pages like with The Hamlet of Thumble.

I don't know honestly. If that happens again though, we may try to put it in 80 or 96 pages, so people don't complain that it's packed too tight with text.

Personally I liked that there was no "wasted space" at all in the Hamlet, you could've easily charged 150% more for the book and it would still be worth it.