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SkidAce

Legend
Supporter
1. "In a small village, in an obscure kingdom..." There shouldn't be a comma in between village and in.
2. "This horrible curse is sickening the inhabitants until they finally die." is written poorly. "This horrible curse is causing the inhabitants to sicken and die."
3. "...and your companions are brave, and hunger..." doesn't need that comma.
4. "While traveling among the Realms..." Realms shouldn't be capitalized unless it's referring to a specific name like the Forgotten Realms. They may have been referring to a proper name, but with their track history...
5. "...and seek a small Inn to find rest in." Inn should not be capitalized there and the last "in" just sounds funky. Leave it off.
6. "However soon after arriving..." There should be a comma after however.
7. "...this curse, and at the same time save the world even from possible doom." You don't need the comma between curse and and. Further, the word "even" shouldn't be in that sentence. It should just be, "..save the world from possible doom." Not that level 1-2 PCs should be saving the world in any case, but that's a different issue.
8. "The Cult of Abaddon is an adventure written for a small party of 4 for levels 1 to 2..." That makes my head hurt. "The Cult of Abaddon is an adventure written for 4 adventurers of levels 1-2..."
Okay friend, leave the dramatic "pause" comma alone. Next thing you know you will be critiquing the Oxford comma.

:LOL:
 

Divine2021

Adventurer
The point that he is making is about the trope of well poisoning: Persecution of Jews during the Black Death - Wikipedia

But it's an aside in the thread, and he admits that it is conjecture

edit: fixed!
It’s pearl clutching on top of making absolutely ignorant comparison. You can hate on who ever this NuTSR weirdo is, but you can do it without saying stupid stuff like this. It could also be a Final Fantasy 6 reference, they had a well poisoning scene in that!

see, see how stupid that looks?
 


It’s pearl clutching on top of making absolutely ignorant comparison. You can hate on who ever this NuTSR weirdo is, but you can do it without saying stupid stuff like this. It could also be a Final Fantasy 6 reference, they had a well poisoning scene in that!

see, see how stupid that looks?
Indeed, I think if anything the marginalized group most closely associated with false accusations of well poisoning in the middle ages was lepers (I read an academic article on it at some point, but can't remember the details). And really if I was going to look for a reason why someone would write a fantasy story involving a cult poisoning a well, and somehow the common fantasy trope of that happening and a clunky allegorical reference to supposed toxicity of the community of "Morrus" didn't explain it, I'd just guess that the author used some of their pandemic downtime to binge the Wild, Wild Country documentary series on the Rajneeshpuram community that was promoted heavily on Netflix a few years back, which featured a real world religious community actually being involved in poisonings (including of public water supplies, though the main incident was salad bars).

LaNasa and co. seem to suck plenty, but even Freud acknowledged that sometimes a cigar is just a cigar.
 


toucanbuzz

No rule is inviolate
...It would appear to violate the PI designation in the 5e SRD put out under the OGL, and under the OGL if they use the 5e SRD then they must comply with the 5e PI designation....
I stand corrected. So it's likely a copyright violation unless they got permission from WOTC. Which maybe they did, but my gut says given their relationship, probably not.
 

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