D&D 5E Apostles of Ruin: Enhanced Villains Eve of Ruin

[Shardstone]

Your Comditions are great. These should be used in 3pp and vanilla.

 

[dave2008]

To @FitzTheRuke , @Matrix Sorcica , @Quartz and anyone else: any more comments or typos to be picked up? I have updated everything noted so far and I am wondering if there is more to come.

 

[Not a Decepticon]

Thank you, this iwll be much appreciated.

 

[FitzTheRuke]

I've been trying to find time to give it a full once-over with my "Editor's Eye", but I haven't finished. Here's what I've got for you:

Under Vulnerabilities, Resistances, & Immunities (Object Resistances & Immunities) at the end of the paragraph it says "with a rarity or Rare and lower" when it means to say "with a rarity of Rare and lower".

At the end of the same page it says "it can choose actions from the listed provided" when it means to say "... the list provided".

Under Conditions - Possessed it says "You are Incapacitated and loose control of you body" when it means to say "... lose control of your body".

Weakened says "half damage on a failed Saving Throw and a no Damage on a miss" (ditch the 'a').

In Kas' 2nd paragraph is says "either by his sword or an outside Powers. Ought to be either "by outside powers" or "an outside power", whichever you were going for.

All nitpicks, of course! This document is awesome. If I have time later, I will try to keep going.

 

[dave2008]

This is great and very help, and no rush. I would rather take time and get it right than have to post a v3.0! Just one comment...

I've been trying to find time to give it a full once-over with my "Editor's Eye", but I haven't finished. Here's what I've got for you:

Under Vulnerabilities, Resistances, & Immunities (Object Resistances & Immunities) at the end of the paragraph it says "with a rarity or Rare and lower" when it means to say "with a rarity of Rare and lower".

At the end of the same page it says "it can choose actions from the listed provided" when it means to say "... the list provided".

Under Conditions - Possessed it says "You are Incapacitated and loose control of you body" when it means to say "... lose control of your body".

Weakened says "half damage on a failed Saving Throw and a no Damage on a miss" (ditch the 'a').

...this. It should be Powers as I am talking about it an older edition sense of beings with Power: aka gods and similar entities. At least when I am looking at old 1e/2e books and the talk about Powers like this, they capitalize it. So it should be (I think): ...or outside Powers.

In Kas' 2nd paragraph is says "either by his sword or an outside Powers. Ought to be either "by outside powers" or "an outside power", whichever you were going for.

 

[FitzTheRuke]

This is great and very help, and no rush. I would rather take time and get it right than have to post a v3.0! Just one comment...

...this. It should be Powers as I am talking about it an older edition since of beings with Power: aka gods and similar entities. At least when I am looking at old 1e/2e books and the talk about Powers like this, they capitalize it. So it should be (I think): ...or outside Powers.

Oh yeah, that makes sense. I'll see if I can keep going this evening!

 

[Distracted DM]

Your Comditions are great. These should be used in 3pp and vanilla.

Agreed! I actually thought they were the playtest conditions- I haven't look too much at it but knew it had new conditions :'D

 

[dave2008]

I actually thought they were the playtest conditions- I haven't look too much at it but knew it had new conditions :'D

dazed and slowed are from the playtest, but the rest, IIRC, are ones I made or borrowed from unofficial sources.

 

[dave2008]

I've been trying to find time to give it a full once-over with my "Editor's Eye", but I haven't finished. Here's what I've got for you:

Under Vulnerabilities, Resistances, & Immunities (Object Resistances & Immunities) at the end of the paragraph it says "with a rarity or Rare and lower" when it means to say "with a rarity of Rare and lower".

At the end of the same page it says "it can choose actions from the listed provided" when it means to say "... the list provided".

Under Conditions - Possessed it says "You are Incapacitated and loose control of you body" when it means to say "... lose control of your body".

Weakened says "half damage on a failed Saving Throw and a no Damage on a miss" (ditch the 'a').

In Kas' 2nd paragraph is says "either by his sword or an outside Powers. Ought to be either "by outside powers" or "an outside power", whichever you were going for.

All nitpicks, of course! This document is awesome. If I have time later, I will try to keep going.

I've fixed those - ready for more!

 

[Paul Farquhar]

You forgot the hertilod.