Spoilers Star Wars: The Acolyte [Spoilers]

Show, don't tell has been a primary teaching tool in creative writing for decades.

It's true that "show don't tell" has been a fiction writing maxim "for decades," but—ironically—you're arguing for its opposite. Indeed, the show does show that cortosis exists: we see The Stranger use it to parry and disrupt the lightsabers of the jedi, and their surprise is clear by the acting. Your actual complaint appears to be that we're not told what cortosis is: you want it to be named and described by the characters. In my estimation, it would be poor storytelling to do so.

You're entitled to your preference, of course, but I don't think that it's an error of craft that the show is showing rather than telling. It's more immersive to witness the shock of the jedi and to see their reaction. Their not knowing that it is cortosis and our not knowing that it is cortosis heightens the tension and creates a mystery and an obstacle. To better fight The Stranger, the jedi now need to investigate the phenomena to learn about it (for their sake and ours) and how to counter it.

I have 2 degrees in it.

Good. With two degrees in creative writing, surely you would concede that many effective narratives withhold information from the reader that the protagonists themselves are not privileged to. Even if it's not your aesthetic preference, this is something that most narratives do, and not all of them are considered to be poorly executed.

Consider Hemingway. The Sun Also Rises and "Hills Like White Elephants" are two of his best examples of his "iceberg theory" in which the only a small fraction of the story is visible above the waterline and the bulk of it lies beneath the waves, where it needs to be inferred. Some people don't enjoy Hemingway's aesthetic, but that's a subjective appraisal. The contemporary critical consensus is that Hemingway was, when he was writing his best prose, a master craftsman.

The Jedi know cortosis exists. You only had to add ONE line of dialogue in the show. "Beware, he is armored with cortosis."
We have no reason to believe that these jedi know what cortosis is and every reason to believe that they do not from their reaction to its effect on their sabers. But, if they did know, they would have no reason to explain what cortosis is to each other—only to us, in which case the show would be using exposition (a form of telling) rather than showing us an explanation such as Sol investigating the mystery and learning its answers in the jedi archives. It's good he doesn't know everything, isn't it? We don't want our jedi to look like know-it-all Mary Sues, do we? Moreover, breaking into the fight scene with a line of exposition would slow the pace of the narrative. There have been plenty of instances in which your fellow critics have complained about what they already perceive to be a slow pace. Let's not bog down the narrative for their sake.

Instead, you have youtube video after youtube video trying to "explain" it to everyone who never encountered the EU.
I personally don't mind "intertextuality," which is as old as extant narrative itself. Homer doesn't both to explain everything needed to fully contextualize his stories. The audience is expected to bring knowledge from other epics to The Iliad to fully understand it. This approach to narrative has been prevalent in the Star Wars universe since at least the prequels. To expect Star Wars to suddenly abandon Easter Eggs is unrealistic—but at least I think we can all agree that there are fewer of them in this show than in most.

And, all that said, you're making one assumption that some of don't. You take it as a given that we're not going to learn what the deal with cortosis is. I would be highly surprised (and bothered, yes) if we don't eventually learn about it. These episodes aren't episodic; this is a serialized narrative, and we need to watch them all for the complete story and a complete context to view the entire story in.

Reading through this thread, I'm left with one major supposition. There critics of this show are not watching it in good faith, whereas I am. Thus far, I trust the director and the writers to take me to a satisfactory conclusion. I've yet to see what I consider to be major errors of craft in the narrative and I'm willing to give this show the benefit of the doubt. It's obvious that some other viewers feel the opposite way, and, if it's their thing to hate watch Star Wars shows, that's cool with me. It's not mine, though, and that should be cool too.
 

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Showdown tell is also very open t9 interpretation.

Generally you need to explain major plot points imho. You don't need to explain how blasters work.

That may involve show don't tell. Retcons ale need a bit.

Bringing the emperor back is mostly a mistake but makes some amount of sense with cloning and the dark side. Somehow Palpatine returned isn't a good idea.
 

No.

I do not need you to do anything or fix my opinion. I will refer to what has happened with Hussar later in the thread as a prime example of what happens here. He gives examples, gets dogpiled by folks who need to prove him wrong.

It is not well-executed. There is some solid acting. There are some nice themes; however, the show has the exact same issues that plagued BOBF, Ahsoka, Obi-Wan etc.

The writing is inconsistent. There is no "show, don't tell," and they seem to want to add unexplained fan service. I am sorry but you cannot use video games, animated shows, and EU themes that have never appeared in live action and expect that to make sense to the majority of the audience. Lucasfilm has even complained in the past that a huge portion of the LA audience will refuse to work animated content etc.

For me, I immediately knew it was cortosis for example, but I am a mega SW fan who has consumed pretty much every bit of SW media. For the audience, they could easily have added one line "beware, he is armored with cortosis" as a nod to the audience.

This type of writing disengages many viewers and confuses them.
im not interested in fixing your opinion, but I am sure not interested in discussing your preferences. Unless you provide examples or evidence then it is not an opinion, it is a preference and there is little point in debating it. As, you cannot debate taste.

frex. you say it is not well executed. What was not well executed, and how was it not well executed? A statement is not a fact. It is, without evidence, a preference, and not debatable.

I can say, for one audience member, i was not confused about cortosis. I remember it after this episode, but before this, i had forgotten about it, and I was not confused or surprised by its inclusion at all.
 

I dunno about anyone else but I am arguing in good faith.

Wow. I don’t particularly like one Star Wars show and now I’m a baby, too stupid to understand and arguing in bad faith. This is getting ridiculous.

Episode 3, imo, was poorly paced and largely pointless. Introduce a bunch of red shirt Jedi that do nothing except die in the first five minutes of ep 4. Osha says she wants to let the Jedi handle May and tries to leave only to do a complete 180 because Sol asks nicely. Then spend half the run time walking through a forest.

Then we have episode 4 which is just chock a block with inconsistencies.

Look I want to like this. I like Star Wars. But this show is getting more and more not for me. I’ll give it one more episode but unless it really knocks it out of the park I’ll likely stop watching. So telling me how wrong I am for pointing out the inconsistencies isn’t really productive. Telling me I’m just too stupid to understand the brilliance of the show is incredibly condescending.

@damiller is right. This is about preferences. I’ve stated why I don’t particularly like this show but no one seems to be telling me why they do as they trip and fall over each other to tell me why I’m wrong.
 

I liked how Yord used Qimir's helmet to short out his lightsaber too. Shame he then got his neck broken. Yord also recognized Qimir, but that may have only been from earlier in the show.

Overall I am liking this show. No, it's not perfect, but I would rate it above The Book of Boba Fett but below Andor and The Mandalorian S1–2. Not sure how I'd rate it in comparison to Ahsoka, Obi-Wan, or The Mandalorian S3.

The fight scenes in this latest episode were fantastic. It was dark, so therefore hard to see what was happening at times, but that just makes the glow of the sabers stand out even more. I really like the way the sabers look on these shows, especially in the dark. The colors are so vivid.

Osha says she wants to let the Jedi handle May and tries to leave only to do a complete 180 because Sol asks nicely. Then spend half the run time walking through a forest.
She didn't really want to leave, but Yord insisted. And it was her sister Mae who called out to her to return, not Sol.
 
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I liked how Yord used Qimir's helmet to short out his lightsaber too. Shame he then got his neck broken. Yord also recognized Qimir, but that may have only been from earlier in the show.

Overall I am liking this show. No, it's not perfect, but I think it's better than Boba Fett. Probably on par with Ahsoka, Obi-Wan, and Mando S3. Not as good as Mando S1 or S2. (Hard to beat those two in terms of live action Star Wars.)

The fight scenes in this latest episode were fantastic. It was dark, so therefore hard to see what was happening at times, but that just makes the glow of the sabers stand out even more. I really like the way the sabers look on these shows, especially in the dark. The colors are so vivid.


She didn't really want to leave, but Yord insisted. And it was her sister Mae who called out to her to return, not Sol.

Notice a lot of ls fights are in darker environment. Reys yellow saber in RoS looked bad due to lighting. Apparently it's why Luke uses green vs blue in RotJ.

Fan tweak but you get the point.


I suspect Ahsokas ones would also look bad in similar lighting. Mando S2 they looked great.

Reys blue one looked good in TFA as well. Dark forest.
 
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Ironically I just watched that elsewhere. Same as earlier. I suspect lighting and maybe a more vivid special effects.
Huh. OK. By same as before, do you mean the white light ones that got colored in post production? Or are they actually the color that they appear on screen (if maybe not as vivid in real life)?


Lightwhips are more or less a female weapon.

Lumiya, Silri, Githany and Venestra.

More coincidence but something I noticed.
I expect there's a stereotypical dominatrix influence there.



Here's my theory: someone, probably Indara, decided that the witches "weren't allowed to exist" (as Qimir put it), so the four Jedi killed them all and then started the fire (or amplified Mae's fire) to cover up the massacre. Indara and Sol seem to have been able to live with it (hence Qimir asking Sol what he did with his darkness), while Kelnacca went into hiding and obsessed over it and Torbin retreated into his impenetrable mind palace in an attempt to meditate his way out of his guilt.

As for Qimir, I think it's plausible that he came across a Sith holocron (or some other Sith artifact) in his travels. Yord remarked that Qimir fought with no style, which suggests to me that he is self-taught. But he is familiar enough with the Sith to be able to use the term symbolically.

I did like the exchange where Sol asked why Qimir risked exposing himself, and Qimir replied, "Well, I did wear a mask ..."

I'm curious to see what happens next, now that the twins have swapped places. I suspect Mae did it a) to escape being murdered by Qimir and b) to wrangle the truth out of Sol and maybe expose him. I think Qimir is aware he's got Osha in his possession, hence why he didn't kill her, but Sol seems to be none-the-wiser for now. (I expect the tracker will reveal the truth before long.)
 
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Huh. OK. By same as before, do you mean the white light ones that got colored in post production? Or are they actually the color that they appear on screen (if maybe not as vivid in real life)?



I expect there's a stereotypical dominatrix influence there.



Here's my theory: someone, probably Indara, decided that the witches "weren't allowed to exist" (as Qimir put it), so the four Jedi killed them all and then started the fire (or amplified Mae's fire) to cover up the massacre. Indara and Sol seem to have been able to live with it (hence Qimir asking Sol what he did with his darkness), while Kelnacca went into hiding and obsessed over it and Torbin retreated into his impenetrable mind palace in an attempt to meditate his way out of his guilt.

As for Qimir, I think it's plausible that he came across a Sith holocron (or some other Sith artifact) in his travels. Yord remarked that Qimir fought with no style, which suggests to me that he is self-taught. But he is familiar enough with the Sith to be able to use the term symbolically.

I did like the exchange where Sol asked why Qimir risked exposing himself, and Qimir replied, "Well, I did wear a mask ..."

I'm curious to see what happens next, now that the twins have swapped places. I suspect Mae did it a) to escape being murdered by Qimir and b) to wrangle the truth out of Sol and maybe expose him. I think Qimir is aware he's got Osha in his possession, hence why he didn't kill her, but Sol seems to be none-the-wiser for now. (I expect the tracker will reveal the truth before long.)

They were white ones.

Edit some were colored.
 

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