The Invasion of Mori OOC [3.5][planar][PAUSED]
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Bloodweaver1
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Yea I know, I greatly apologize.
Will something and post in the IC within 24 hours.
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Will something and post in the IC within 24 hours.
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Bloodweaver1
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Update the Character Sheet.
Need another review and to pick a name (though I may go nameless as who amoung the abyssals would call him by his actual name?)
-Blood
Need another review and to pick a name (though I may go nameless as who amoung the abyssals would call him by his actual name?)
-Blood
moritheil
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Bloodweaver1 said:
Great, thanks. By the way - where did you put it?
The RG thread is here: http://www.enworld.org/showthread.php?p=3013579
Shayuri, you may want to consider putting Silhouette's sheet up there as well.
Bloodweaver1
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My bad.
Moved the character sheet over the RG thread.
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Moved the character sheet over the RG thread.
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moritheil
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I'm starting to review your sheet. It's really condensed, which looks nice in some places but makes it a pain to audit or adjust on the fly. While I am looking at one specific sheet, my statements about what I (or other DMs) need to see in a sheet can be generalized.
Ok, you need to fix a few things:
"Feral"
Monstrous Humanoid (Earth)
Alignment needs an entry. I'll let name and deity slide because maybe you don't have either.
You don't seem to have accounted for your racial HD separately from your Gargoyle LA. LA+5, 4 HD is very different from LA +9, since the number of total HD you have matters for some spells.
This is way too cramped. You don't have to list all your racial bonuses here (you can do so in your attribute block instead) but you do need to explain non-numerical things more clearly. For example, summarize the "Freeze" ability. Yes, I can always open another window if I really want to look it up, but that takes time and I already have 10 windows open right now. It's better to have everything right there on the sheet.
Since you have SA: Freeze (you don't need to write out Special Ab) you should remove it from the DR 10/Magic line. Fast Healing also isn't DR so it gets its own line.
Hide, Listen, and Spot are your Gargoyle HD class skills. That's important; you should probably note that when you mention your racial HD. How many skill pts/level do you get? Is it 2 or 4 for monstrous humanoid? I don't know off-hand, and it should be listed.
This part is really good. I would like to see a breakdown of each of your stats, though, along the lines of "Str 28 (+9) (18/base 4/rac 2/bon 4/enh)" This way it will be obvious what happens if you get a spell that gives an enhancement bonus of +6 str.
This looks nice - but where are the breakdowns for your saves? It's 3 resistance, right? I don't like seeing "misc" because I need to be able to see at a moment the types of all bonuses (it matters for how things stack.) I do also like seeing saves broken down into X from racial HD, Y from fighter, Z from ability. I should basically be able to read your sheet like a flowchart so I know at a glance where everything comes from.
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Name:
Class: Gargoyle (LA9)/Ferial (LA1)/Fighter 4
Age: ??
Race: Monstrous Humanoide Height: 6' 6"
Size: Medium Weight: ??? lbs
Gender: Male Eyes: Deep Black
Alignment: Hair: None
Deity: Skin: Black/Green MarbleOk, you need to fix a few things:
"Feral"
Monstrous Humanoid (Earth)
Alignment needs an entry. I'll let name and deity slide because maybe you don't have either.
You don't seem to have accounted for your racial HD separately from your Gargoyle LA. LA+5, 4 HD is very different from LA +9, since the number of total HD you have matters for some spells.
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Class & Racial Traits:
Gargoyle Feral Template
+4 Str & Dex HD: Change to d10
+8 Con, -4 Int & Cha Speed +10ft
Darkvision: 60' AC: +6 Natural
Racial HD: +4d8 Nat. Attack: 2xClaw (1d8)
Dmg Red: 10/Magic, Freeze Fast Healing: +8
AC: +4 Natural Improved Grab, Pounce, Rake
+2, Hide, Listen, Spot
Special Abil: FreezeThis is way too cramped. You don't have to list all your racial bonuses here (you can do so in your attribute block instead) but you do need to explain non-numerical things more clearly. For example, summarize the "Freeze" ability. Yes, I can always open another window if I really want to look it up, but that takes time and I already have 10 windows open right now. It's better to have everything right there on the sheet.
Since you have SA: Freeze (you don't need to write out Special Ab) you should remove it from the DR 10/Magic line. Fast Healing also isn't DR so it gets its own line.
Hide, Listen, and Spot are your Gargoyle HD class skills. That's important; you should probably note that when you mention your racial HD. How many skill pts/level do you get? Is it 2 or 4 for monstrous humanoid? I don't know off-hand, and it should be listed.
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Fighter & Class Levels
Feats: 6
ABility Points: 2
Str: 28 (+9) Level: 14 XP:
Dex: 26 (+8) BAB: +8/+3 HP: 112 (8d10+72)
Con: 28 (+9) Grapple: +17 Dmg Red: 10/Magic
Int: 04 (-3) Speed: 40' Flight: 60' (Good)
Wis: 16 (+3) Init: +5 Spell Res: -
Cha: 04 (-3) ACP: -2 Spell Fail: 30%
Base Armor Shld Dex Size Nat Misc Total
Armor: 10 +5 +5 +8 +0 +10 +2 40 (41)
Touch: 17 Flat-Footed: 26This part is really good. I would like to see a breakdown of each of your stats, though, along the lines of "Str 28 (+9) (18/base 4/rac 2/bon 4/enh)" This way it will be obvious what happens if you get a spell that gives an enhancement bonus of +6 str.
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Base Mod Misc Total
Fort: 5 +9 +3 +17
Ref: 5 +7 +3 +15
Will: 5 +3 +3 +11This looks nice - but where are the breakdowns for your saves? It's 3 resistance, right? I don't like seeing "misc" because I need to be able to see at a moment the types of all bonuses (it matters for how things stack.) I do also like seeing saves broken down into X from racial HD, Y from fighter, Z from ability. I should basically be able to read your sheet like a flowchart so I know at a glance where everything comes from.
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Bloodweaver1
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Noted and corrected.
Let me know what you think.
About the skills, with a -3 Int and a (2+Int) per level he does not have any skills besides the racial bonuses.
-Blood
Let me know what you think.
About the skills, with a -3 Int and a (2+Int) per level he does not have any skills besides the racial bonuses.
-Blood
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