Star Wars: Tales of the Jedi (OOC Thread)

Overall there weren't many problems I could find with it besides a number of spelling mistakes in the second to last sentence.

There was one sentence that was kind of confusing to me.

"During one of his journeys he ended up in an altercation within the Republic, wherein he met Mikos Thy'Wen, a Jedi master who managed to work out a peaceful resolution for the Krevaaki."

Did you mean that he got into a fight/arguement while he was in the republic, or that he got into a fight/arguement with the republic?
 

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You could say the fight was with functionaries of the republic, but yes the republic itself is represented by its functionaries istn it? It could be like a burocratic problem or the sort
 

Understood, how's this?

Voda Vosa lived on his homeworld of Krevas for much of his life; seeking knowledge in the swampy lands of his world before becoming a druid (a nature priest of his people similar to those of the Ithorians). Seeking a better understanding of the universal phenomenon of life and the force, Voda Vosa left Krevas and started traveling the galaxy. During one of his journeys he ended up in an altercation with Republic authorities. It was then that he met Mikos Thy'Wen, a Jedi master who managed to work out a peaceful resolution for the Krevaaki.

Voda Vosa is a crustacean-like creature, with deep glistening black eyes that seem to peer everywhere. His gender is unclear since for the Krevaaki it is not something individuals are born with, but rather something they gain during each reproductive season. "He" can switch between being male or female depending on the nature of the reproductive season. It matters little since few beside the Krevaaki could spot the differences between either gender.

Voda is quite centered, but all that crumbles when he is faced with pain. The Krevaaki is afraid of pain as he hates it with all his soul. It is the reason why he is so perceptive; he seeks to foresee painful situations so that he may avoid them. Voda always tries to maneuver himself out of these kinds of situations by avoiding them outright or using force tricks to sidestep them. Others may see it as cowardice, but Voda prides himself on his talents in dodging pain.

Voda often thinks deeply about all things, even the simplest sentence is motive enough to trigger his reflective behavior. Impulsive reactions and the sort are "visceral constraints" for this Krevaaki.

The robe he wears covers his six walking tentacles and the remaining two he uses as hands to hold his quarterstaff; the symbol of his druidic order. He is well trained in martial arts and so the staff is more than merely decorative.

I also changed self-centered, which means selfish, to centered, which can mean secure or calm.

Finally, I changed 6 to six and 2 to two. Don't you hate those words that sound alike but are spelled differently?
 


You're very welcome.

Rhun, it's not that I have anything against her dressing like that whenever she feels like it, but I can't help but point out that all those long clothey things would likely be a hindrance in a battle situation, and that the shin guard and shoulder pad would only cover the parts they're on with molten metal if they were hit by a lightsaber. :D
 

Hey let the girld shows what she gots. Either way, you will be distracted by her demi-naked beauty, Voda is on "female" mode in this season, and cant reproduce with anyone lacking spermatophores, or spermatheca if Voda was on "male" mode. I just asume his biology is like the one of the crabs and shrimps, it makes it somehow funny :p
 

Alrighty then.

I'm generally an amiable, easygoing person. I have but one real pet peeve, and that is being willfully ignored when I have a legitimate question.

Possum is hereby found guilty of that crime.

He's had every chance to answer...I even posted in the IC thread. I've given him every chance to respond.

I realize it's no skin off his nose, and thus hardly a punishment, but the only reasonable thing for me to do, I think, is withdraw. Not only is his update pace pretty slow...but I cannot abide playing with a GM who is so unresponsive to even the simplest of questions as, "Am I in or not?"

I wish you all well.

Happy gaming.
 

Seriously possum, what's the deal? If you've got a problem that's keeping you from posting then please use the time you do have to explain it. And don't tell me it's appendicitises.

Shayuri, please don't give up just yet, if possum doesn't respond, I'll quit too.

I can't be happy gaming under a gm that acts like he seems to be.
 
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lol

You ever have one of those moments where you want to sink into the quantum foam and vanish forever?

That's me now. I reread Possum's post, and he DOES answer the question.

Granted, not very vociferously. It's easy to miss too, with that dark grey OOC text of his. But still...damn. I expended a lot of Rage points over absolutely nothing. And now I feel the burn.

My gut reaction was to edit my rant post...but that feels a bit dishonest. I had a Dark Side moment, and I'll let it stand.

On the other hand, given that it was made in error, I hope I can retract my conclusion. :)

Any objections?
 

Shayuri, what are you talking about? At one point in this thread he said he supposed he could make room for one more player, but then in the IC thread he's said that there are only four. He hasn't said anything about who's playing since. Or did I miss something? :confused:
 

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