gregor vs. p-kitty
maldur-
Gregor: Great story, great characters! One of the best stories I ever read in ceramic DM so far!
Piratecat: wow, after reading a great story by gregor, another really great story.
verdict: damn this is hard. By far the best entries are up against one another. Both deserve to continue to the next round.
but I have to choose for gregor this time! Sorry P-kitty
speaker-
High quality entries. Absolutely impressive work from both contestants.
Gregor: A thought-provoking story of revenge. Justice? Vengeance? Atwixt
the two, perhaps, and all ending in death. The depth of writing your piece
holds is impressive, both in diction and form. You captured the pictures
effectively and bent them to your tale.
Piratecat: Also makes an exceptional showing of it, with a cunning
protagonist who is at the same time a James Bond like figure and one that
somewhat defies that tradition. The language you use is stylistic and
fitting. I particularly enjoyed the subtle fragments of Spanish you added
to the dialogue. Your use of the pictures and archetypes of the
spy/thriller genre was direct and effective.
I wavered, I made lists, I argued. And in the end, my vote goes to:
Piratecat, by a whisker.
alsih2o-
gregor- i was not fond of the ending, or of the rape scene, and still i loved this story! when you can write about ugly stuff like that and hold my interest your are really writing. this is some great stuff. in some minor way the sumolady pic seems tacked on. i am not sure how well it works withing the story, but when the script is realeased for the movie i am sure it will be my favorite scene
p-kitty- i love this one too, the only real weakness i see is the quick glossing of the entry into the sumolady's compound. but i really enjoyed the hero. his attitude and concern left me with a urge to hear moe about him, and that is good writing.
i had a really hard time with this one. i expected big from p-kitty, and gregor lit me up as an unknown quantity. if i had known what gregor had up his keyboard/sleeve i may have posted a warning to p-kitty instead of him. similar sensations in how the timeline was handled but drastically different heroes. if i just keep writing this summation maybe a winner will spring into my mind
four reads later, i just want more form each of you. but i have to go with piratecat, but barely and only by his more unusual handling of the pics, through going modern and having the woman be the bbeg.
result- piratecat at by 2-1, probably more like 1.6 to 1.4 if we could break it down that way...