Steven Erikson: "Memories of Ice"<A critique, and a thread on style and criticism>

jester47

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Hi, recently I have been reading Steven Erikson's Memories of Ice. Doing so is part of a project where I sample the "Tome Tossers"* and see if I think they are all that they are cracked up to be.

BEGIN REVIEW---

Memories of Ice as written works as a stand alone book. That is one thing that attracted me to Erikson. Each book in his series can stand as an idependant novel. Memories of Ice does this well; at no point did I feel that somthing went unexplained. However, aside from a couple of cool characters and some truely cool scenes (as opposed to the numerous "supposed to be cool" scenes) I have gotten very bored with this book. Since I have already stated what I think is good about the book, I will now detail the reasons I probably will not finish it:

Throughout the story Erikson tries to give the sense of the languages of his world. If you understand a little about how languages work and borrow, you may find this annoying. In my opinion using made up languages should not be attempted if you do not have a solid (read PhD) background in the language. Some of the annoyances for example are: Rath' means priest. So we have a slew of Characters with the Rath'Name for thier name. This is stupid. Why not just use the word "priest" or find a word that already exists that connotes ecclesiastical rank? Then there is "Ullid" meaning "cavalry," and "lites" meaning infantry. "Betak" means "medium." So in this book we have the "Betakullid" and the "Betaklites." You guessed it, Medium Infantry and Medium Cavalry. Why this waste of time and mental effort? It is in my opinion a copout for characterising the fighting force. As a counterpoint one might bring up Tolkien saying he did the same with this languages. I beg to differ. Tolkien used his own languages when there was a concept that did not have an english word to illustrate it. Erikson's work is redundant and it shows how little he knows of how languages work: the key point here is that english only borrows when it does not have the word. Erikson's technique as a result seems forced. However, Erikson's background in archeology and anthropology does shine through his work and makes for a very original world and a magic that seems to have heavy doses of shamanism. This is refreshing in light of all the "quasi-celtic" magic we see in fantasy lit these days.

The next problem, and a little more severe is the prose style. It takes Erikson a paragraph to say what can be conveyed in a remark of a character or in two better written sentences. As a result his dialog seems fake as it leaves out the trivial content found in real conversations. We get a sentence about how one character wanted to do the cooking rather than having another character compliment or criticise the first characters meal preparation. We get a paragraph that explains the positioning of 2 characters relative to the third rather than him putting it in one sentance and using the words "both," "flanked," with "left" and "right." This is consistent throughout the novel, and I suspect counts for at least 200 of the 890 pages. Its longer because he is not being careful, thus the novel is "overwritten."

Gratuity in perpetuity. This is the next flaw in this book. Erikson wants very much to be seen as cool, in, with it. There is no other reason for the exhibitionary aspects of his stories. We don't need a description of one character pleasuring another durring a meeting because they were bored. We only need it to come out in conversation. We don't need a third of a page of a barbarian woman coming on to an old man. Those are details that are not pertinent to the story, which is somthing that does not need more than a sentence. In a similar vein we get a lot of poseing, screenshots, and other "cool" scenes. While cool scenes are nice, obviously arranging things in the story just so you can make one happen is no good. There is a word for it- contrived.

The next problem is the narrative. Erikson has a legion of characters. This is not all bad. However, he tries to show you almost every moment of these character's lives in the extent that they relate to the main plot. This gets boring, even when there is lots of action. Trimming down the subplots would make for a more solid narrative that was easier to follow. This is not to say that the subplots need to be any less in number, but rather the detail that we as readers are told about them needs to be lessened. This would make the work more readable without diminishing the complexity of the story and cut out probably another 200-300 pages, maybe more. Erikson however seems to find it important that we identify with numerous characters and find all his plots interesting.

Oh, on a sort of humorous side note, I find the continent is quite boring. It looks like a map of a cucumber. Continents aren't shaped like cucumbers....

In conclusion I find Memories of Ice to be a failure due to the technical aspects of the writing. While it has some cool ideas in fantastic magic and world building, the language in the world creation is forced, the prose is overwritten, and the action is gratuitous (in a bad way) and contrived. All of the above is deftly packaged in a scatterbrained narrative that makes the action more difficult to follow for the casual reader. Best to avoid this one unless you don't mind bad prose fighting you every inch for what would otherwise be a great story.

END REVIEW---

Aaron.

*A "Tome Tosser" is a writer who continuously throws out large 500+ page works. Jordan, Erikson, Goodkind, and Martin are all Tome Tossers.
 
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jester47 said:
*A "Tome Tosser" is a writer who continuously throws out large 500+ page works at an alarming rate. Jordan, Erikson, Goodkind, and Martin are all Tome Tossers.

Robert Jordan and George RR Martin? At an alarming rate?

Jordan manages less than one "Wheel of Time" book a year, on average. Martin does a lot of editing, but "Song of Ice and Fire" started back in 1996, and only has 4 books in it, making it one every two years. Neither rate is at all alarming.
 

Your flippant reference to these authors as "tome tossers", stating your mission to "see if I think they are all that they are cracked up to be" right off makes me think you are out on a mission to tear these books down rather than provide a balanced review for the typical ENWorld member.

While all of Erikson's books work as stand alones is still far better to read them in order. The layers of the worldbuilding are being peeled back like an onion book by book, and starting at book three makes it difficult to appreciate it--or some of the subtleties of the returning characters.
 

Umbran said:
Robert Jordan and George RR Martin? At an alarming rate?

Jordan manages less than one "Wheel of Time" book a year, on average. Martin does a lot of editing, but "Song of Ice and Fire" started back in 1996, and only has 4 books in it, making it one every two years. Neither rate is at all alarming.

From what people have been saying Martin might actually be someone I like in pure technical aspects. I look forward to that part of the project.

1000 page books at one a year is fast. If they were 350-500 then yeah ok, thats a reasonable clip. 1000 pages a year is PDQ. However, the term did not originate with rate but rather numbers. In that respect Martin may be a tome pitcher in that he takes time with his tosses, I will have to see and I seem to have gotten my hopes up.

But you are right, I should take out the alarming part. That is largely a perception of Jordan, its seems like every time I turn around there are two new Jordan books, and I work in a book store!!! However the definition and flippance are not intended to be part of the review. I will mark that clear in the post with the review.

Aaron.
 
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Cordo said:
Your flippant reference to these authors as "tome tossers", stating your mission to "see if I think they are all that they are cracked up to be" right off makes me think you are out on a mission to tear these books down rather than provide a balanced review for the typical ENWorld member.

While all of Erikson's books work as stand alones is still far better to read them in order. The layers of the worldbuilding are being peeled back like an onion book by book, and starting at book three makes it difficult to appreciate it--or some of the subtleties of the returning characters.

Look at my review without the flippant opener. And yes my introduction of the review is supposed to be flippant. My review I think is fair. I do not look at the actual story I don't say his ideas suck and that he is not creative. I am writing my review from the perspective of someone who looks at how the writing is done. I appreciate his world (even though this particular continent looks like a cucumber) I have picked up on many of the subtleties of the world and characters. I really like some of the characters. Quick Ben and Whiskyjack are well done believable chaacters. Gruntle comes off as well developed also. But that was not the problem with the presentation of his world. As I stated it was his use of naming conventions and language.

But that is not my point. You vaccine is useless if you have a shoddy way of delivering it, and that is my criticism of Erikson. His delivery is sloppy and shoddy. He took 890 pages to tell a story that could have been told just as well in half that, IMO, and to better effect. That is my criticism. I look at the technical side of his writing, because that is how you judge a writer. From what I have read he has the potential to be a great storyteller but his writing needs work. If anything, keeping the complexities straight is what gets him some redemption.

Aaron.
 
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I did take a look at it, and I noticed that the Tome Tosser phrase crept in there. I clarified some things and curbed some of the remarks that made it seem like I was trying to provoke somthing. I think it is a pretty nice review now. Let me know what you think.

Aaron.
 

Your reply to me casts your review in a different light. I think it would be a more balanced and better review if you included something like that at the beginning...

* Here's what Erikson does which is good
A
B
C
* Unfortunately, his writing leaves much to be desired and overshadows his strengths...

... and then the rest of your review could be tacked on here which is basically stating your case for why you think the writing is bad.
 

Aaron, I just want to say I really liked your review. It was a good read, there are so many multi-volume fantasy series out there I need all the help I can get in sorting out which ones to look at. I look forward to seeing other reviews and hope your not put off by the negative posts.

Umbran and Cordo, I think "Tome Tosser" is a legitimate terms of mockery to use for all the authors of multi-volume series out there. Martin's not the worst, there's an recent interview where Martin says he started in 1991. And his stuff is very good, so I'd forgive him almost anything. But even he is churning stuff out faster than any of the mid-century multi-volume fantasy authors. Modern fantasy is littered with multi-volume series written relatively quickly, a complete reversal from earlier fantasy where the dominant form was short story. Flagging that it perfectly okay.
 
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So... is the problem that they're produced quickly, that they're long, or that they're bad? 'Cause really, anyone complaining about long, good books being produced quickly does not have enough real world problems and is just making stuff up to whine about. It's fine to complain about bad books, and legitimate to suggest reasons for that badness, but to say that a specific length and production time is inherently flawed, even if the books are good, is... well... dumb.

And yeah, starting in book three, even book three of a series of books that can stand alone, is a bit silly from review purposes.
 

nikolai said:
I think "Tome Tosser" is a legitimate terms of mockery to use for all the authors of multi-volume series out there.

Whether it's a legitimate term of mockery begs the question of whether it is legitimate to mock prolific authors.

But even he is churning stuff out faster than any of the mid-century multi-volume fantasy authors.

Yes. So, they should be mocked for changing with the times? They don't do it the "good old fashioned way" like it was done back inthe 50s and 60s, so we should deride them for it? We should attach a name to them as a class that implies shoddy workmanship without first considering the quality of the works the individuals produce?

Try this - should we really compare the rate of production of mid-century authors to late century authors without considering the impact of the technological development of the word processor in the late 1980's, and that development's impact on the writing and editing processes?

Flagging that it perfectly okay.

Flagging it is okay, only after you've carefully considered what you're flagging, and why. And only after some thought is really given to the comparison. You now shift the start of Martin's series back to 1991. That makes five books in 13 years. Why on Earth does this count as at all remarkable? In a thirty year career, Heinlein produced something like 40 books. Compared to that, Martin's still behind the curve. Isaac Asimov produced some 500 books in his seventy year life. Compared to that, Jordan's still a rank amateur.
 

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